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Write about the following topic: Some people believe that young adults are free to choose a job they really want to be in the future. Others, however, think that they should be realistic. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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There is a hot debate about the choosing job of young generation in the future. I agree that young adults should pick a job they are into; however, I also believe that they should chase a top job. The following essay will firstly discuss in detail it while it will then outline about my personal perspective. On the one hand, why young adults are free to choose a job they really want to be in the future? First of all, they can do their dream job perfectly so they may be rapid promotion. For instance, a person does his dream job, he can use all his knowledge and enthusiasm to complete his duty. Secondly, their lives will be happy without stress. They work things that conform with their talent; therefore, the job will be easy.
There is a hot debate about the choosing
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job
of young generation in the future. I
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agree
that young adults should pick a
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they are into;
however
, I
also
believe that they should chase a top
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job
. The following essay will
firstly
discuss in detail it while it will then outline about my personal perspective.

On the one hand, why young adults are free to choose a
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they
really
want to be in the future?
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First of all
, they can do their dream
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job
perfectly
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so
they may be rapid promotion.
For instance
, a person does his dream
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job
, he can
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use
all his knowledge and enthusiasm to complete his duty.
Secondly
, their
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lives
will be happy without
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stress
. They work things that conform with their talent;
therefore
, the
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will be easy.
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IELTS essay : Some people believe that young adults are free to choose a job they really want to be in the future. Others, however, think that they should be realistic.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
135 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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