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Some people like taking one long vacation each year. Others enjoy taking several shorter vacations. Which do you prefer?

Some people like taking one long vacation each year. Others enjoy taking several shorter vacations. Which do you prefer? r6l6n
In my opinion, I would love to take a long vacation. Because I will have more time to enjoy my vacation as valuable as possible and discover the place where I come in. Furthermore, a long vacation is an ideal time for me to review my past and intentions, and balance my thoughts. First of all, it will take a long time to relish myself and my time. Actually, I will have a significant amount of time to enjoy my vacation as meaningful as possible. I can separate my vacation into an exciting plan. For example, when I used to be on a seven-day DaLat vacation. On the first day, my friend and I will enjoy the nearby landscapes or go to the local market so as to taste their local cuisines. On the second day, I will go to distant places to sightsee and explore there, … Another reason, this is a chance to deeply explore the place’s culture and community where I travel. As I said above, I will have more time to enjoy the beautiful landscapes and special local food and beverages which are some unforgettable points. Besides, I can experience and roleplay with the local citizens to get to know their customs and manners that are very unique and valuable. Finally, I will have adequate time to think about my past. To be honest, a long vacation is a golden time for us to balance my physical and mental health after some stressful working days and tough responsibilities. I will have more time to consider my present tasks or intentions in the future and review my past behaviours, actions and decisions. As a result, it will be beneficial for me to return to my work or study and refresh my mind to start for every time within a positive and optimistic spirit. In conclusion, I would prefer to enjoy a long vacation. Because it is enough time for me to enjoy my vacation, think and review my past, and I can deeply explore where I travel. All that means, it will help me balance my thoughts and take into account my past and intentions in the future. Moreover, I can broaden my perspective while having adequate time to discover my destination.
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as meaningful as possible. I can separate my
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into an exciting plan.
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market
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to discover my destination.
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IELTS essay Some people like taking one long vacation each year. Others enjoy taking several shorter vacations. Which do you prefer?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
375 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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