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Some people like doing work by hand Others prefer using machines Which do you prefer Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.1

Some people like doing work by hand Others prefer using machines Which do you prefer Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 1
Increasing dependence on the technical gadgets, such as computers, which is one of the greatest inventions of the human being, has proved an asset. This essay intends to delve into the predictions about its uses. I, however, believe that we should harvest the benefits of these machines in a cautious manner. To commence with, although these days computers are being used in distinct organisations for different purposes, such as hospitals, crime department, and many more, the future use will be related to educational motive. Since in the contemporary world, everything has become modernised and education field is no exception. For instance, various websites and YouTube channels are serving the purpose of providing the education to students and moreover, e-books, e-newspapers, e-magazines are a great source of knowledge. This way it can be predicted that educational field will be greatly influenced by the computers. However, it must be kept in mind that the over dependence on anything is not advantageous so we must be cautious while using it for several objectives. Because there are lots of health hazards pertaining to the excessive use of computers, therefore keeping health in mind, it should be used cautiously. To cite an example, weak eyesights, back-pain and obesity are the problems that are arising as a result of sitting in front of these devices. That is why it would be wise to reap their benefits in an effective way, despite its adverse effects on the health. To sum up, it is irrefutable that computers are a boon in the modern era and is continuously being in use in various fields. People will continue to harvest its benefits for schools, colleges and researches as well. I believe that in spite of its great advantages, we should reap its benefits with precautions.
Increasing dependence on the technical gadgets, such as computers, which is one of the greatest inventions of the human being, has proved an asset. This essay intends to delve into the predictions about its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
. I,
however
, believe that we should harvest the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
benefits
of these machines
Consider replacing "in a cautious manner" with the adverb for "cautious"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a cautious manner
.

To commence with, although these days computers are being
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used
in distinct
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organisations
for
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different
purposes, such as hospitals, crime department, and
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many
more, the future
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use
will
be related
to educational motive. Since in the contemporary world, everything has become
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modernised
and education field is no exception.
For instance
, various websites and YouTube channels are serving the purpose of providing the education to students and
moreover
, e-books, e-newspapers, e-magazines are a great source of knowledge. This way it can
be predicted
that educational field will be
greatly
influenced by the computers.

However
, it
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must
be
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kept
in mind that the over dependence on anything is not advantageous
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so
we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be cautious while using it for several objectives.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
there are lots of health hazards pertaining to the excessive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of computers,
therefore
keeping health in mind, it should be
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used
cautiously
. To cite an example, weak
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eyesights
, back-pain and obesity are the problems that are arising
as a result
of sitting in front of these devices.
That is
why it would be wise to reap their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
benefits
Consider replacing "in an effective way" with the adverb for "effective"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an effective way
, despite its adverse effects on the health.

To sum up, it is irrefutable that computers are a boon in the modern era and is
continuously
being in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
in various fields.
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People
will continue to harvest its
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benefits
for schools, colleges and researches
as well
. I believe that
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in spite of
its great advantages, we should reap its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
benefits
with precautions.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people like doing work by hand Others prefer using machines Which do you prefer Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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