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Some people get in debt by buy things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

Some people get in debt by buy things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem? r9Kn
In This modern life, masses public debutante into buy new things that even they not necessary and can not pay. First, nowdays people have plethora of varieties in the market. Here consequently they might have confusion to what to buy and what not to purchase. However, the public might awareness of advertisement for various products available in the market. Here, citizens spend a lot off amount upon unnecessary items and then thinks to return it back to the particular shop due to contradicts they may not exchange it on contracts to
In This modern life, masses public debutante into
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
new things that even they not necessary and can not pay.

First
,
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nowdays
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have plethora of
The usual preposition for "varieties" is "of" not "in." Revise: "varieties of".
varieties in
the market. Here
consequently
they might have confusion to what to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
and what not to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
.
However
, the public might awareness of advertisement for various products available in the market. Here, citizens spend a lot off amount upon unnecessary items and then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thinks
to return it back to the particular shop due to contradicts they may not exchange it on contracts to
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IELTS essay Some people get in debt by buy things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
90 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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