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People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your opinion. v.1

People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your opinion. v. 1
Dresses are important part of people life and it is seen that people act in different manner depending on types of cloths they are wearing. I have opinion that attires change the people’s mood and people get influenced by the types of clothes. I shall explain and give example to support my point in below essay. To begin with, People wear different dresses depending on the need of the occasions which majorly drives the actions of people. It is generally seen that people have various tastes in terms of clothing and match the suitability of cloths with events. For instance, my neighbor who is renowned doctor in city wears track suit in the morning and can be seen acting as a fitness freak in the gym, while during day time in the doctor’s coat, his behavior is changed completely. Additionally, people buy the different attires based on the events that are going to participate and most of the time their action are influenced by the dress they choose to put on. Another point is that society has some clothing trends depending on the situation which people follow and that define the behavior expected. In every society, there are different attires for wedding, death, various ceremony and people take pride to follow based on the requirements. For instance, white attires are quite common when people attend the funerals or attending the death anniversary and their actions are controlled by the environment and clothing type make them realize to act as per situation. To conclude, dresses are not only mood changer but also control the actions and above given examples exhibit that people are influenced by the attire they wear and act in accordance with types of dress they wear.
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life and it is
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of cloths they are wearing. I have opinion that
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attires
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change
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people’s
mood and
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people
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get
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types
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explain
and give example to support my point in below essay.

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People
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dresses
depending on the need of the occasions which
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people
. It is
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seen
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people
have various tastes in terms of clothing and match the suitability of cloths with
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events
.
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, my neighbor who
is renowned
doctor in city
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wears
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track
suit in the morning and can be
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seen
acting as a fitness freak in the gym, while during day time in the doctor’s coat, his behavior is
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changed
completely.
Additionally
,
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people
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different
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attires
based on the
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events
that are going to participate and most of the time their
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action
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by the
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dress
they choose to put on.

Another point is that society has
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clothing trends depending on the situation which
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people
follow and that define the behavior
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expected
. In every society, there are
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different
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attires
for wedding, death, various ceremony and
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people
take pride to follow based on the requirements.
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, white
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attires
are quite common when
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people
attend the funerals or attending the death anniversary and their actions
are controlled
by the environment and clothing
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type
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make
them realize to act as per situation.

To conclude
,
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mood changer
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control the actions and above
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and act in accordance with
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wear
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9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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