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Some people find advertisements amusing or annoying and they are not influenced by this when they shop.

Some people find advertisements amusing or annoying and they are not influenced by this when they shop. neVPl
Ads are the main source to publicize new or existing products. Some individuals feels that few adverts are frustrating and they are not convinced to buy a product. To my mind, I partially agree with this notion. To begin with, advertisement gives the information about latest inventions and unbelievable offers available in the market. The solo aim of an advertisement is to attract customers. Few ads are pretty interesting and attractive such as showcasing a new model automobile and its comforts and features. For instance, couple of months back i came across an advertisement on a new model of Honda car which has some distinct features as compared with its competitors. That ad made me to replace my old car with a brand new one. However, There are many ads which are annoying and not encouraging people to buy their products. Firstly, though few companies tries to do mass advertise to contaminate the individuals mind, very rarely people are people are influenced when they shop. For example, now a days, in my part of world, there are many advertisements in televisions, radios and newspapers to buy specially made gold rings or chains which will impact our fate and brings lovely times in our life. But extremely short percentage of people are purchasing these sort of items. Secondly, Some ads are pretty good. But due to lack of quality in advertisement, they are not getting attention of shoppers. For instance, I have noticed in various adverts related to energy drinks are very simple. Just famous sports person or a movie star drinking their product. It does not give any information related to its taste, energy ratio, etc. As a result, it may not attract new customers. To sum up, the main job of an advertisement is to attract shoppers. I believe an ad will be attract customers only if it has good quality, useful information and present it to a right people.
Ads are the main source to publicize
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new
or existing
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products
.
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Some
individuals
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feels
that few adverts are
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frustrating and
they are not convinced to
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buy
a
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product
. To my mind, I
partially
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agree
with this notion.

To
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begin
with,
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advertisement
gives the information about
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latest
inventions and unbelievable offers available in the market. The solo aim of an
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advertisement
is to
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attract
customers. Few ads are pretty interesting and attractive such as showcasing a
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new
model automobile and its comforts and features.
For instance
,
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couple of
months back
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i
came across an
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advertisement
on a
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new
model of Honda car which has
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some
distinct features as compared with its competitors. That ad made me to replace my
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old
car with a brand
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new
one.

However
, There are
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many
ads which are annoying and not encouraging
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people
to
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buy
their
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products
.
Firstly
, though few
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companies
tries to do mass advertise to contaminate the individuals mind,
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very
rarely
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people
are
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people
are influenced
when they shop.
For example
,
Did you mean "nowadays"?
now a days
, in my part of world, there are
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many
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advertisements
in televisions, radios and newspapers to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
specially
made gold rings or chains which will impact our fate and brings lovely times in our life.
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But
extremely
short percentage of
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people
are purchasing
Did you mean "this sort" or "these sorts"?
these sort
of items.
Secondly
,
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Some
ads are pretty
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good
.
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But
due to lack of quality in
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advertisement
, they are not getting attention of shoppers.
For instance
, I have noticed in various adverts related to energy drinks are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
simple.
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Just
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famous
sports person or a movie star drinking their
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product
. It does not give any information related to its taste, energy ratio, etc.
As a result
, it may not
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attract
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new
customers.

To sum up, the main job of an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
is to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
attract
shoppers. I believe an ad will be
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attract
customers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
if it has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
quality, useful information and present it to a right
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
.
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IELTS essay Some people find advertisements amusing or annoying and they are not influenced by this when they shop.

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  American English
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321 words
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