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Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

eciding Marriage age is a significant decision of life. A number of individuals hold the assumption that the minimum valid age of being qualified for marriage ought to be 21 years old. The essay will subscribe to agree with this view despite having some potential problems. The view can have various difficulties. Firstly, there is a great of regions in the world where people can alive only 40 to 45 years. If those palaces' public wait for the 21 years to get married, then they will have little opportunity to procreate children. For instance, the citizens of African county Namibia can reside the world approximately 40-50 years because of the inherent nature of their country. As a result, the government urges to involved in marriage as soon as possible. So, enacting laws for getting married at least at 21 years can be harmful for some people and areas. On the other hand, a host of individuals is in favour of at least 21 years of being a valid couple although considerable drawbacks are visible. They indicate that to illuminate adolescents carrier, government as well as parents should not permit their offsprings in engaging wedlock prior to 21 years. Because it is high time to determines and enlighten their future. The next hypothesis can be to enjoy their emerging life Otherwise, they will hardly have to spend their hours in comfortable and luxurious ways if they accept bridal prior to 21. Afterwards, they will posses children with whom they require to spare their noticeable days. For example, Bangladesh government, a couple of months ago, made the citizens understand the vitality of being married after 20 years. He furthermore added that adolescent life is for enjoyment and building carrier time. To conclude, in spite of having noteworthy conveniences of arranging wedding under 21, it is conclusively detrimental for improving carrier in addition amusing with growing age. The essay discussed the view and agreed the minimum year of marriage should be 21 years though it has some inconveniences.
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eciding
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Marriage
age is a significant decision of life. A number of individuals hold the assumption that the minimum valid age of
being qualified
for
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marriage
ought to be 21 years
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old
. The essay will subscribe to
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agree
with this view despite having
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some
potential problems.

The view can have various difficulties.
Firstly
, there is a great of regions in the world where
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people
can alive
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only
40 to 45 years. If those palaces' public wait for the 21 years to
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get
married, then they will have
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little
opportunity to procreate children.
For instance
, the citizens of African county Namibia can reside the world approximately 40-50 years
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because
of the inherent nature of their country.
As a result
, the
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government
urges to involved in
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marriage
as
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soon
as possible.
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So
, enacting laws for getting married at least at 21 years can be harmful for
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some
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people
and areas.

On the other hand
, a host of individuals is in
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favour
of at least 21 years of being a valid couple although considerable drawbacks are visible. They indicate that to illuminate adolescents carrier,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
as well
as parents should not permit their offsprings in engaging wedlock prior to 21 years.
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Because
it is high time to determines and enlighten their future. The
next
hypothesis can be to enjoy their emerging life
Otherwise
, they will hardly
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have to
spend their hours in comfortable and luxurious ways if they accept bridal prior to 21. Afterwards, they will
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posses
children with whom they require to spare their noticeable days.
For example
, Bangladesh
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government
, a couple of months ago, made the citizens understand the vitality of
being married
after 20 years. He
furthermore
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added
that adolescent life is for enjoyment and building carrier time.

To conclude
,
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in spite of
having noteworthy conveniences of arranging wedding under 21, it is
conclusively
detrimental for improving carrier
in addition
amusing with growing age. The essay discussed the view and
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agreed
the minimum
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year
of
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marriage
should be 21 years though it has
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some
inconveniences.
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IELTS essay Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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