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Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. rwn2
There are lot of freelance photographers who surround the celebrities for taking candid pictures. A number of people say that paparazzi should not pursue celebrities and disturb their privacy everywhere as it effects their personal living. Some believe that it is just the price of fame. I agree with this opinion. This essay discusses both these opinions of paparazzi effects the celebrity life status and it is the price of the fame the famous personality holds. Every individual on this planet desires to have balance between the professional and personal life. Celebrities are often followed by photographers who capture every moment of their life. This type of continuous follow can lead to physical and mental stress. Moreover, the family members of these celebrities always complain that they do not get enough time because of the media, and authorities should have appropriate laws to tackle this situation. For example, In a recent interview on Fox news, family members of famous celebrity mentioned that they go thorough lot of mental stress as they are followed by photographers and spoil their private space. However, famous people are aware that this intrusion into their lives is a small price to pay for the attention and adultation they receive. As their fans follow them everywhere, they are interested in every minute details of their idols. Making the decision of becoming famous is voluntary and they understand all the consequences they would face if they are famous. Inconclusion, I believe that famous personalities should not be disturbed whey they are spendinf quality time with the family members and closed ones. However, it is true that media should respect the privacy of all individuals, famous personalities also need to realise that the enroachment on privacy is the price to be paid for being popular.
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lot of
freelance photographers who surround the
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celebrities
for taking candid pictures. A number of
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people
say that paparazzi should not pursue
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celebrities
and disturb their privacy everywhere as it effects their personal living.
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Some
believe that it is
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just
the
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price
of fame. I
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agree
with this opinion. This essay discusses both these opinions of paparazzi effects the
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celebrity
life status and it is the
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price
of the fame the
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famous
personality holds.

Every individual on this planet desires to have balance between the professional and personal life.
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Celebrities
are
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often
followed by photographers who capture every moment of their life. This type of continuous follow can lead to physical and mental
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stress
.
Moreover
, the family members of these
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celebrities
always complain that they do not
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get
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enough
time
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because
of the media, and authorities should have appropriate laws to tackle this situation.
For example
, In a recent interview on
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Fox news
, family members of
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famous
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celebrity
mentioned that they go thorough lot of mental
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stress
as they
are followed
by photographers and spoil their private space.

However
,
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famous
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people
are aware that this intrusion into their
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lives
is a
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small
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price
to pay for the attention and
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adultation
they receive. As their fans follow them everywhere, they
are interested
in every minute
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details
of their idols. Making the decision of becoming
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famous
is
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voluntary and
they understand all the consequences they would face if they are
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famous
.

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Inconclusion
, I believe that
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famous
personalities should not
be disturbed
whey they are
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spendinf
quality time with the family members and closed ones.
However
, it is true that media should respect the privacy of all individuals,
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famous
personalities
also
need to
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realise
that the
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enroachment
on privacy is the
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price
to
be paid
for being popular.

IELTS essay Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame.

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