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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life? v.13

People become more successful in their life even though they failed in their school. In fact, failures are the pillars to success and, the path to success is strewn with failures. I believe that success comes to those who work try and never tire. So, hard work is the main important aspect of success and one should always trust himself to reach his goals in life. To begin with, the road to success is not an easy one. It is narrow, rough patchy, long, and full of obstacles. One has to learn to overcome these hurdles to achieve his desired goal. Therefore, to be a winner, a person must strive with perseverance, courage, and determination. Success cannot be achieved in one day and a person should sweat and struggle a lot to taste the victory. For instance, look at the first step of a child. He takes a step forward but then on the second one he stumbles and falls. But he will never give up and tries hard next time. Rather his stumbling ensures that he will not only learn to walk but run around also. There are famous people who did not perform well in their school but reached higher positions in their chosen field. For example, Akshay Kumar the world knows him as the best actor and national award winner in Bollywood. But as a kid he failed in hi school and terrified of his result, but later he worked so hard to become an actor. Dedication and passion to become a great actor is the key to his success. Secondly, a person should never be afraid of failures and trust in his hard work. We should take inspiration from the failures in our life and we can follow enormous success. Let’s take the example of KFC founder Colonel Harland Sanders, he was a 6th grade dropout and was rejected over 1000 times. But with his secret recipe to fried chicken, he became successful businessman in the world as he believes in himself and his recipe more than anything and worked hard. However, in today’s time, we find that people are losing heart at the drop of a hat. Students are committing suicides unable to face the failures. To conclude, I believe that failure is not the end of the world. There would be opportunities galore to rise and shine. This is the key factor of many people who are successful in their life.
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become more successful in their life
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failures
are the pillars to
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success
and, the path to
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success
is strewn with
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failures
. I believe that
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success
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comes
to those who work try and never tire.
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,
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work is the main
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aspect of
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success
and one should always trust himself to reach his goals in life.

To
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begin
with, the road to
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success
is not an easy one. It is narrow, rough patchy, long, and full of obstacles. One
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has to
learn to overcome these hurdles to achieve his desired goal.
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, to be a winner, a person
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strive with perseverance, courage, and determination.
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cannot
be achieved
in one day and a person should sweat and struggle a lot to taste the victory.
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, look at the
first
step of a child. He takes a step forward
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but
then on the second one he stumbles and falls.
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he will never give up and tries
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next
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Rather
his stumbling ensures that he will not
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only
learn to walk
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run around
also
. There are
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famous
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people
who did not perform well in their school
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but
reached higher positions in their chosen field.
For example
, Akshay Kumar the world knows him as the best actor and national award winner in Bollywood.
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But
as a kid he failed in hi school and terrified of his result,
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but
later he worked
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so
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hard
to become an actor. Dedication and passion to become a great actor is the key to his success.

Secondly
, a person should never be afraid of
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failures
and trust in his
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hard
work. We should take inspiration from the
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failures
in our life and we can follow enormous
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success
.
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Let
’s take the example of KFC founder Colonel Harland Sanders, he was a 6th grade dropout and
was rejected
over 1000 times.
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But
with his secret recipe to fried chicken, he became successful businessman in the world as he believes in himself and his recipe more than anything and worked
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hard
.
However
, in
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today
’s time, we find that
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people
are losing heart at the drop of a hat. Students are committing suicides unable to face the failures.

To conclude
, I believe that
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failure
is not the
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end
of the world. There would be opportunities galore to rise and shine. This is the key factor of
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many
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people
who are successful in their life.
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IELTS essay Some people fail in school but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
407 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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