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Some people enjoy watching movies or television in their spare time. Others prefer reading books or magazines. State which you prefer and explain why. v.1

Some people enjoy watching movies or television in their spare time. Others prefer reading books or magazines. State which you prefer and explain why. v. 1
Some individuals argue that the major problem associated with the ecosystem is the disappearance of specific types of flora and fauna, whereas certain others think that there are other significant issues related to the environment. Although, some species of animals and plants had vanished within the time which creates problems in life cycle, there are other significantly important problems which may be dangerous for the life of human beings. On the one side, disappearance of particular types of flora and fauna had disturbed the natural life cycle. By this I mean to say that when some species became completely lost, there are chances of increment in population of their preys. This might be not good for other small animals and by this way, the whole cycle will be disturbed. For example, the extinction of tigers in major part of the world has become crucial and damage the natural life cycle around 10%, according a survey conducted by WHO. In my opinion, this problem is not significant because it does not impact consequently on the environment and there are very effective ways to preserve those animals and plants. On the other side, life threatening problems such as global warming has significant impact on the environment. This is to say that increasing amount Co2 emission have raised up a temperature level in the environment which melts south and north pole’s ice caps and ice bergs. As a result, the sea level is continuously rising up which leads to drowning of many islands. A good reference for this is that, Japan is sinking down 1% per year, according to researchers at Stanford University. I believe that these problems have a major effect on the future of human beings so these problems should be taken seriously. In conclusion, though, the extinction of some types of flora and fauna has an impact on the natural life cycle of food, other major issues such as global warming ought to be taken seriously because the future of human beings are on the line.
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individuals argue that the
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major
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associated with the ecosystem is the disappearance of specific types of flora and fauna, whereas certain others
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think
that there are
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other
significant issues related to the
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environment
. Although,
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some
species of animals and plants had vanished within the time which creates
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problems
in
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life
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cycle
, there are
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other
significantly
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important
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problems
which may be
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for the
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life
of human beings.

On the one side, disappearance of particular types of flora and fauna had disturbed the natural
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life
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cycle
. By this I mean to say that when
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some
species became completely lost, there are chances of increment in population of their preys. This might be not
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good
for
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other
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small
animals and by this way, the whole
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cycle
will
be disturbed
.
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, the extinction of tigers in
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major
part of the world has become crucial and damage the natural
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life
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cycle
around 10%, according a survey conducted by
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WHO
. In my opinion, this
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is not significant
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it does not impact
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environment
and there are
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very
effective ways to preserve those animals and plants.

On the
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side,
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threatening
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problems
such as global warming has significant impact on the
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environment
. This is to say that increasing amount Co2 emission have raised up a temperature level in the
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which melts south and
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north pole
’s ice caps and ice bergs.
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, the sea level is
continuously
rising up which leads to drowning of
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islands. A
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good
reference for this is that, Japan is sinking down 1% per year, according to researchers at Stanford University. I believe that these
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problems
have a
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major
effect on the future of human beings
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these
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problems
should
be taken
seriously
.

In conclusion
, though, the extinction of
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types of flora and fauna has an impact on the natural
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life
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cycle
of food,
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issues such as global warming ought to
be taken
seriously
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because
the future of human beings are on the line.
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IELTS essay Some people enjoy watching movies or television in their spare time. Others prefer reading books or magazines. State which you prefer and explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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