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In some countries, students live with their family while studying at a university. In other countries, students attend university in another city. Do you think the advantages of living away from home while attending university outweigh the disadvantages? v.2

In some countries, students live with their family while studying at a university. In other countries, students attend university in another city. Do you think the advantages of living away from home while attending university outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2
In this modern era, it has been witnessed that most of the common people seek to imitate popular celebrities by following them on media sources such as magazines and television. This essay will discuss the factors that encourage ordinary folks to imitate famous people. Personally, I think this is a bad tendency. To begin with, there are several reasons for this craze among people to follow celebrities. One of the main reasons is that people get attracted to the lifestyle of celebrities and also want to achieve the same in their own daily life. For example, recently an Indian guy bought the same luxury car owned by his idol M. S. Dhoni thinking that this would help him grab attention. People also imitate celebrities to look more stylish and to gain more acceptance in the society. For example, celebrity hairstyles are a rage among young people. Although this tread of copying famous personalities is very common, it is not really laudable. Imitating famous people can only bring temporary joy to the common people. On the other hand, a person might gain permanent happiness by exploring his/her own originality rather than copying the style of celebrities. Furthermore, if a person lives his life in his own way, it boosts his confidence which leads to greater success in his life. To sum up, it is irrefutable that most of the people attempt to imitate well known personalities to improve their social status and to appear stylish. However, this trend is not appreciable as common people lose their originality by copying others. Do you have an essay on this topic? Submit it below in the comments for a free band score estimate.
In this modern era, it has
been witnessed
that most of the
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common
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people
seek to
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imitate
popular
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celebrities
by following them on media sources such as magazines and television. This essay will discuss the factors that encourage ordinary folks to
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imitate
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famous
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people
.
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, I
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think
this is a
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bad
tendency.

To
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begin
with, there are several reasons for this craze among
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people
to follow
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celebrities
. One of the main reasons is that
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people
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get
attracted to the lifestyle of
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celebrities
and
also
want to achieve the same in their
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own
daily life.
For example
, recently an Indian guy
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bought
the same luxury car
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owned
by his idol M. S.
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Dhoni
thinking that this would
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help
him grab attention.
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People
also
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imitate
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celebrities
to look more stylish and to gain more acceptance in the society.
For example
,
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celebrity
hairstyles are a rage among young
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people
.

Although this tread of copying
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famous
personalities is
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very
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common
, it is not
really
laudable. Imitating
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famous
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people
can
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only
bring temporary joy to the
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common
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people
.
On the other hand
, a person might gain permanent happiness by exploring his/her
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own
originality
rather
than copying the style of
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celebrities
.
Furthermore
, if a person
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lives
his life in his
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own
way, it boosts his confidence which leads to greater success in his life.

To sum up, it is irrefutable that most of the
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people
attempt to
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imitate
well known personalities to
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improve
their social status and to appear stylish.
However
, this trend is not appreciable as
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common
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people
lose their originality by copying others.

Do you have an essay on this topic? Submit it below in the comments for a free band score estimate.
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IELTS essay In some countries, students live with their family while studying at a university. In other countries, students attend university in another city. Do you think the advantages of living away from home while attending university outweigh the disadvantages? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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