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Some people do not believe in paying taxes. Do You agree or disagree? v.1

Some people do not believe in paying taxes. v. 1
The governments all over the world have a taxation system, even though, many people find it as wastage of their hard earned money. I firmly believe that it is true and reasons for the same are discussed in this essay. One of the main reasons, why people hate to pay taxes, is that when they compare the facilities provided by the governments to the the amount deducted from their pockets, they find it unreasonable. For instance, working people paying their taxes on time year after year but they barely get to see any improvement in the poorly organized local transportation system, the government hospitals or schools. Thus, gradually they loose their trust in this practice of pick-pocketing their money. If they get charged so much, they wish to use better facilities or they will keep cursing the system. Furthermore, when it comes to taxes, it is not that they are only paying yearly taxes on what they earn but they need to pay extra charges on grocery shooping, toll taxes etcetra. Hence, they feel cheated by their own governments. New York Times published an article stating that in india people pay state and centre taxes on purchase of every single item. Therefore, they end up paying double tax on their shopping. Resultantly, many of them try to avoid paying taxes either by choosing cash payment for their shopping or tranfering money through black markets. In conclusion, if countries can justify their spending of money garnered throug taxes and bring a unified tax system to keep everyone under same umbrella, then only public will feel comfortable in paying taxes. Otherwise, in current scenario, it is purely looting of public money.
The
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governments
all over the world have a taxation system,
even though
,
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many
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people
find it as wastage of their
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hard earned
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money
. I
firmly
believe that it is true and reasons for the same
are discussed
in this essay.

One of the main reasons, why
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people
hate to pay
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taxes
, is that when they compare the facilities provided by the
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governments
to
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the the
amount deducted from their pockets, they find it unreasonable.
For instance
, working
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people
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paying
their
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taxes
on time year after year
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but
they
barely
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get
to
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see
any improvement in the
poorly
organized local transportation system, the
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government
hospitals or schools.
Thus
,
gradually
they
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loose
their trust in this practice of pick-pocketing their
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money
. If they
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get
charged
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so
much, they wish to
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use
better
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facilities or
they will
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keep
cursing the system.

Furthermore
, when it
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comes
to
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taxes
, it is not that they are
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only
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paying
yearly
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taxes
on what they earn
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but
they need to pay extra charges on grocery
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shooping
, toll
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taxes
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etcetra
.
Hence
, they feel cheated by their
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own
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governments
. New York Times published an article stating that in
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india
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people
pay state and
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centre
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taxes
on
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purchase
of every single item.
Therefore
, they
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end
up
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paying
double
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tax
on their shopping.
Resultantly
,
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many
of them try to avoid
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paying
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taxes
either by choosing cash payment for their shopping or
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tranfering
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money
through black markets.

In conclusion
, if countries can justify their spending of
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money
garnered
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throug
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taxes
and bring a unified
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tax
system to
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keep
everyone under same umbrella, then
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only
public will feel comfortable in
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paying
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taxes
.
Otherwise
, in
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current
scenario, it is
purely
looting of public
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money
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people do not believe in paying taxes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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