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Some people consider science subjects are more important than humanitarian subjects like history, sociology, languages for the school children. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people consider science subjects are more important than humanitarian subjects like history, sociology, languages for the school children. 5bkyn
Education is considered to be one of the paramount matters that requires a careful approach. The dramatic highly growth of teaching can even be seen in all parts of the world. The argument that science subjects are more essential than humanitarian subjects is the topic that is both supported or refuted by many people. Sides of this issue will be analysed before a reasoned conclusion is drown. To begin with, scientists claim that academic studies are so significant source that life cannot be imagined without it. For instance, today was the presidential school exam in mathematics for pupils. So, it is the exact experimental subjects that serve to further develop children`s knowledge. Therefore, this is an argument that can be supported. In addition, humanitarian subjects also have a great role of our universe. This can be taken as example that history helps us to know our past, to learn languages improve knowledge skills and also useful for careers. In my view, a depth study of this discipline will supply that students are mature in all respects. Thus, this can be the notion that could possibly be assisted. Above seen matter make clear that the importance of science and humanitarian subjects are very crucial in whole world`s schools. For this reason, the idea that learners should learn all of branches of knowledge can be approved. It is predicated that categories both of subjects will consider to be a necessary resource for schoolchild in the future. (244 words)
Education
is considered
to be one of the paramount matters that requires a careful approach. The dramatic
highly
growth of teaching can even be
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seen
in all parts of the world. The argument that science
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subjects
are more essential than humanitarian
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subjects
is the topic
that is
both supported or refuted by
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many
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people
. Sides of this issue will be
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before
a reasoned conclusion is
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drown
. To
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begin
with, scientists claim that academic studies are
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so
significant source that life cannot
be imagined
without it.
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,
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today
was the presidential school exam in mathematics for pupils.
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So
, it is the exact experimental
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subjects
that serve to
further
develop
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children`s
knowledge.
Therefore
, this is an argument that can
be supported
.
In addition
, humanitarian
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subjects
also
have a great role of our universe. This can
be taken
as example that history
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helps
us to know our past, to learn languages
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improve
knowledge
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skills
and
also
useful for careers. In my view, a depth study of this discipline will supply that students are mature in all respects.
Thus
, this can be the notion that could
possibly
be assisted
. Above
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seen
matter
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make
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clear
that the importance of science and humanitarian
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subjects
are
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very
crucial in whole
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world`s
schools.
For this reason
, the
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idea
that learners should learn
Consider using "all branches" or "all of the branches".
all of branches
of knowledge can
be approved
. It
is predicated
that categories both of
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subjects
will consider to be a necessary resource for schoolchild in the future. (244 words)
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IELTS essay Some people consider science subjects are more important than humanitarian subjects like history, sociology, languages for the school children.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
245 words
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