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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. v.34

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. v. 34
Waste recycling is one of the most widely discussed issues around the globe, especially among the environmentalists and concerned bodies, and even after numerous global initiatives and continuous announcements, people seem to react whimsically to this exercise. Many opine that people have a tendency to abide by a responsibility only when there are rules and legal obligation and this is why waste recycling should be a legislation and mandatory to adhere to and I also agree with this group. To begin with, waste recycling is a great way to save the environment and reuse many valuable materials. Some household garbage contains detrimental ingredients and can cause harm to the surroundings and can pollute the environment. If every house owner takes the responsibility to participate in the waste recycling, the waste management as well as preserving a green environment would become easier. However, this is not the case and many people still ignore this. Thus comes the question whether making it a law would force people to participate more and save the environment? I believe this will. It is natural that people have a tendency to ignore many important tasks - be it for themselves or for the society as a whole. They are sometimes as careless as crossing the busy streets instead of taking the overpass or underpass, though the later one is safer. On the contrary, when legal obligations and punishment for an act are in place, the number of participants seems like increases dramatically. For instance, when crossing busy streets instead of using the underpass in some cities have been made a legal offence, the number of road accidents decreased significantly over the time. In a similar way when a government would make the recycling mandatory by imposing laws, people would participate more to this. This is so sensitive an issue that this should have already been a part of the law. In fact, the main objective of the law is to deter people from doing something bad and punish the offenders in order to maintain a peaceful society. Since waste recycling is directly related to our environment and the well-being of our future generation, we should make it a legal responsibility so that people do not ignore this important issue. In conclusion, law and rules exist to encourage and force people to follow the good trends and avoid bad practices. Since people are not spontaneously participating waste recycling and the amount of garbage is increasing, the government must have defined rules and legislation to control it for the benefit of all.
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Waste
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recycling
is one of the most
widely
discussed issues around the globe,
especially
among the environmentalists and concerned bodies, and even after numerous global initiatives and continuous announcements,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
seem to react
whimsically
to this exercise.
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Many
opine that
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people
have a tendency to abide by a responsibility
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
when there are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and
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legal
obligation and this is why
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waste
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recycling
should be a legislation and mandatory to adhere to and I
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this group.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
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waste
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recycling
is a great way to save the
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environment
and reuse
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many
valuable materials.
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Some
household garbage contains detrimental ingredients and can cause harm to the surroundings and can pollute the
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environment
. If every
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
owner takes the responsibility to participate in the
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waste
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recycling
, the
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waste
management
as well
as preserving a green
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environment
would become easier.
However
, this is not the case and
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many
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people
still
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
this.
Thus
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comes
Consider shortening this phrase to just "whether", or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question".
the question whether
making it a
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law
would force
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people
to participate more and save the
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environment
? I believe this will.

It is natural that
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people
have a tendency to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
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many
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important
tasks
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
be it for themselves or for the society as a whole. They are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
as careless as crossing the busy streets
instead
of taking the overpass or underpass, though the later one is safer.
On the contrary
, when
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
legal
obligations and punishment for an act are in place, the number of participants seems like increases
dramatically
.
For instance
, when crossing busy streets
instead
of using the underpass in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
cities have
been made
a
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legal
Possible spelling mistake. 'offence' is British English.
offence
, the number of road accidents decreased
significantly
over the time.
Consider replacing "In a similar way" with the adverb for "similar"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
In a similar way
when a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
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recycling
mandatory by imposing
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laws
,
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people
would participate more to this. This is
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so
sensitive an issue that this should have already been a part of the law.

In fact, the main objective of the
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law
is to deter
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people
from doing something
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
and punish the offenders in order to maintain a peaceful society. Since
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waste
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recycling
is
directly
related to our
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environment
and the well-being of our future generation, we should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it a
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legal
responsibility
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so
that
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people
do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
this
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
issue.

In conclusion
,
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law
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
exist to encourage and force
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people
to follow the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
trends and avoid
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
practices. Since
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people
are not
spontaneously
participating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycling
and the amount of garbage is increasing, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
have defined
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and legislation to control it for the benefit of all.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. v. 34

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
424 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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