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Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.5

Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. v. 5
It is evident that medicines and other products are frequently tested on animals before they conform to safety standards for human use. Whilst I consent to the viewpoint that animal testing is morally wrong, I would have to support a limited amount of animal experimentation for the development of medicines. On the one hand, some people support using the animal in medical research testing due to different aims. Obviously, every investigation needs meticulously conducting as the health of people must be high on the agenda. Therefore, using the animal in medical experiences enables scientists to investigate treatments for human diseases by exploring how organisms function or how genes work. Medical solutions, for example, which may pose a potential risk to humans will be used with animals before they are proved to be cleared for human use. On the other hand, I concur with that it is inhumane to test medicines on animals. Initially, animal rights activists argue that the lives of all animals should be respected. Furthermore, these medicines may be deadly to humans but not to most laboratory animals. This is because animals do not seem to contract the human diseases as we do and the differences in physiology or cell structures between animals and humans. Besides, there are alternative non-animals methods of testing. For instance, “organs-on-chips” that contain human cells grown in a state-of-the-art system can be used instead of animals in disease research. In conclusion, although animal testing contributes greatly to scientific advances, it is my strong conviction that the benefits to humans do not justify the suffering caused and humans have no right to do experiments on animals. Hence, we should utilize alternative methods when performing medical analysis to protect animals from suffering.
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frequently
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tested
on
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animals
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before
they conform to safety standards for
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human
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use
. Whilst I consent to the viewpoint that
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animal
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testing
is
morally
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wrong
, I would
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have to
support a limited amount of
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animal
experimentation for the development of medicines.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
support using the
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animal
in
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medical
research
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testing
due to
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different
aims.
Obviously
, every investigation needs
meticulously
conducting as the health of
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people
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must
be high on the agenda.
Therefore
, using the
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animal
in
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medical
experiences enables scientists to investigate treatments for
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human
diseases by exploring how organisms function or how genes work.
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Medical
solutions,
for example
, which may pose a potential
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risk
to
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humans
will be
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used
with
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animals
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before
they
are proved
to
be cleared
for
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human
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use
.

On the other hand
, I concur with that it is inhumane to
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test
medicines on
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animals
.
Initially
,
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animal
rights activists argue that the
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lives
of all
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animals
should
be respected
.
Furthermore
, these medicines may be deadly to
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humans
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but
not to most laboratory
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animals
. This is
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because
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animals
do not seem to contract the
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human
diseases as we do and the differences in physiology or cell structures between
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animals
and
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humans
.
Besides
, there are alternative non-animals methods of
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testing
.
For instance
, “organs-on-chips” that contain
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human
cells grown in a state-of-the-art system can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
instead
of
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animals
in disease research.

In conclusion
, although
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animal
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testing
contributes
greatly
to scientific advances, it is my strong conviction that the benefits to
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humans
do not justify the suffering caused and
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humans
have no right to do experiments on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
.
Hence
, we should utilize alternative methods when performing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
analysis to protect
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
from suffering.
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IELTS essay Some people claim that it is acceptable to use animals in medical research for the benefit of human beings, while others argue that it is wrong. v. 5

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  American English
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287 words
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