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# Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. they believe that this not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss the view and give your own opinion. v.11

# Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. they believe that this not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss the view and give your own opinion. v. 11
Some segment of people wants to live to be a vegetarian because they think that it is a best way to live fit and healthy. People who against the animal experiment they also said that do not add non-vegetarian dishes in your meal as it helps the world as a whole. According to my point of view, we should add some proportion of meat or fish in our routine diet. I will explain this in the following paragraph. First of all, vegetarian food such as fruits, vegetables and green leaves which have a reasonable amount of protein as well as nutrition. So that this will produce the healthy and active life conveyed by vegetarians. However, they should think that to maintain the food cycle, otherwise nature will not be sustained in a balanced manner as a whole. For instance, if we try to consume most of the green oriented items, we will be disturbing the food chain which will cause of polluting the natural resources. Although there are a variety of vitamins in non vegetarians, some are not accepting the fact. The human body requires fruitful of food such as seafood and meat. For instance, fish contains Omega 3 oil, which helps in resolving of cardiac and eye problems. On the other hand, if the people take excess of meat, then it causes of some hazards in health. So maintain the diet is the ultimate destination to maintain the health and life peacefully without any causes. To conclude, excess of everything is bad, so people should have a proportional balance in their diet to continue the healthy lifestyle and adding limited non-veg items in our eating habit as a daily routine are the great way of improving our health and to maintain the food chain from the world as a whole.
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segment of
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wants to
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because
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think
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best way to
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live
fit and healthy.
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People
who against the animal experiment they
also
said that do not
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add
non-vegetarian dishes in your meal as it
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helps
the world as a whole. According to my point of view, we should
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add
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some
proportion of meat or fish in our routine diet. I will
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explain
this in the following paragraph.

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First of all
, vegetarian
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food
such as fruits, vegetables and green
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leaves
which have a reasonable amount of protein
as well
as nutrition.
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So
that this will produce the healthy and active life conveyed by vegetarians.
However
, they should
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think
that to
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maintain
the
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food
cycle,
otherwise
nature will not
be sustained
in a balanced manner as a whole.
For instance
, if we try to consume most of the green oriented items, we will be disturbing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
chain which will cause of polluting the natural resources.

Although there are a variety of vitamins in non vegetarians,
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some
are not accepting the fact. The human body requires fruitful of
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food
such as seafood and meat.
For instance
, fish contains Omega 3 oil, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in resolving of cardiac and eye problems.
On the other hand
, if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
take excess of meat, then it causes of
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some
hazards in health.
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So
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maintain
the diet is the ultimate destination to
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maintain
the health and life
peacefully
without any causes.

To conclude
, excess of everything is
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bad
,
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so
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people
should have a proportional balance in their diet to continue the healthy lifestyle and adding limited non-veg items in our eating habit as a daily routine are the great way of improving our health and to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
maintain
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
chain from the world as a whole.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay # Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. they believe that this not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss the view and give your own opinion. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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