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Some people belive that video games shows violence while other believe that is not the case agree or disagree

Some people belive that video games shows violence while other believe that is not the case agree or disagree m373n

It is often seen that people do not feel secure either at their house are going out. What has been disclosed in recent survey has highlighted the need to increase safety not only on the street but also at home. The goal of this essay to put forward that why this happened and how can it will be solve. In every country, rich and poor citizen are concerned about the safety issue both at their home and street. In the first place, individuals had been boom but with the rise in the number of murder, rape or house robbery almost every day. In developing countries, every individual want to show cast their lavish lifestyle, but they do not want to hustle hard, so to on Dot lifestyle they prefer using short cuts for their food clothing and house The problem can firstly be remedied by taking strict actions towards such crimes. There should also be more penalties for such crimes. Criminals should be kept in prison for longer duration. Moreover for road accident government should also build proper roads and should see that rules is being followed properly In conclusion, Street crime and road accidents are two most common reason people do not feel safe at today. It is hoped that this issue must be resolved quickly before it get out of hand.

It is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:frequently
often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 do not feel secure either at their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 are going out. What has been disclosed
 in recent survey has highlighted the need to increase safety not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 on the street This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
 at home. The goal of this essay to put forward that why this happened and how can it will be Consider using the past participle "solved"?solved
solve
.

In every country, rich and poor citizen are concerned
 about the safety issue both at their home and street. In the first
 place, individuals had been boom This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 with the rise in the number of murder, rape or This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 robbery almost every day. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :Third World countrieslow-income countries
developing countries
, every individual want to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 cast their lavish lifestyle, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 they do not want to hustle This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 to on Dot lifestyle they prefer using short This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimizes
cuts
 for their food clothing and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house


The problem can firstly
be remedied
 by taking strict actions towards such crimes. There should also
 be more penalties for such crimes. Criminals should be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 in prison for longer duration. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Moreover,
Moreover
 for road accident This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 should also
 build proper roads and should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rules
 is being followed
properly


In conclusion
, Street crime and road accidents are two most common reason This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 do not feel safe at This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
. It is hoped
 that this issue This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
be resolved
quickly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 out of hand. 