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Question: Recent research suggests that the majority of criminals who are sent to prison commit crimes after they are released. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem.

Question: Recent research suggests that the majority of criminals who are sent to prison commit crimes after they are released. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem. 3bOW5
A study conducted has revealed that a number of people perfrom criminal activities after setting free from the prison. This essay suggests that the difficulty faced by them to become financial stable and psychology are the two biggest reasons behind this phenomenon which can be tacked by governing authorities by providing employment and giving them counselling sessions in jails would help to combat this grave issue. Admittedly, facing problems in finding suitable job after long time is the biggest reason behind this practice. That is to say, every employer checks the background of the employees while providing them a suitable position in the company, and a past offence can create a hurdle in getting a proper job. Therefore, they consider perfroming particular illegal activities, such a robberies of get money for leading a decent life. A recent survey conducted in my own city has shown that about 35% of thieves have spend some time in prisons. Apart from this, mental condition of individuals force them to do such kind of acts. In other words, criminals spend their time with the other offernders in the lock-ups, who cast an adverse effects on their minds and they become rebellious by nature. Thus, their thought pattern give rise the chances of indulging in the anti-social activities. In regard to the soultions, giving suitables jobs to the people after releasing them from jail would assist to deal with this problem. Governing bodies should assure those people to get proper employment, so that they can earn to fulfill the rudimentary needs of themselves. Moreover, getting busy in their work would also prevent them from thinking negative. Furthermore, authorities should organize some awareness seminars in prisons, in which they should convince people to get rid of bad deeds, and also should proviode individual eassion to cghange their mind patterns. On balance, it has been concluded by a survey that people, who spend time behind the bars, are more prone to do the crimes after completing their punishments. This essay describes that lack of money and mind set of masses are the prominent reasons behind this trend, and goverment is responsible for tackling this adversity.
A study conducted has revealed that a number of
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people
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perfrom
criminal activities after setting free from the prison. This essay suggests that the difficulty faced by them to become financial stable and psychology are the two biggest reasons behind this phenomenon which can
be tacked
by governing authorities by providing employment and giving them counselling sessions in jails would
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help
to combat this grave issue.

Admittedly
, facing problems in finding suitable job after long
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time
is the biggest reason behind this practice.
That is
to say, every employer
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checks
the background of the

employees while providing them a suitable position in the
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company
, and a past
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offence
can create a hurdle in getting a proper job.
Therefore
, they consider
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perfroming
particular illegal activities, such
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a robberies
of
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get
money for leading a decent life. A recent survey conducted in my
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own
city has shown that about 35% of thieves have
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spend
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some
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time
in prisons. Apart from this, mental condition of individuals force them to do such kind of acts.
In other words
, criminals spend their
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time
with the other
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offernders
in the lock-ups, who cast an adverse
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effects
on their
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minds and
they become rebellious by nature.
Thus
, their
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thought
pattern give rise the chances of indulging in the anti-social activities.

In regard to the
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soultions
, giving
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suitables
jobs to the
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people
after releasing them from jail would assist to deal with this problem. Governing bodies should assure those
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people
to
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get
proper employment,
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so
that they can earn to fulfill the rudimentary needs of themselves.
Moreover
, getting busy in their work would
also
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prevent
them from thinking
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negative
.
Furthermore
, authorities should organize
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some
awareness seminars in prisons, in which they should convince
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people
to
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get
rid of
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bad
deeds, and
also
should
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proviode
individual
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eassion
to
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cghange
their mind patterns.

On balance, it has
been concluded
by a survey that
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people
, who spend
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time
behind the bars, are more prone to do the crimes after completing their punishments.

This essay
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describes
that lack of money and mind set of masses are the prominent reasons behind this trend, and
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goverment
is responsible for tackling this adversity.

IELTS essay Question: Recent research suggests that the majority of criminals who are sent to prison commit crimes after they are released. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
358 words
6.0
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