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Some people belive that computer skills should learn with school subjects such as reading ,writing and math. Do you agree or disagree.

Some people belive that computer skills should learn with school subjects such as reading, writing and math. 8D1P
In this age and centry most people engaged with computer devices and they think that computer skills should be added to primary subjects in elementry schools. In contrast, firmly advocate that children should learn this subjects itself at first years of school. Some people claimed that computer skills plays vital role in a kids life. They should learn in primary age which boost this skill in adulthood. In addition, in the future most of employers will require computer skills to addition diploma it would be good idea to learn this skill since childhood with school subjects such as reading, writing and mathematics. Computer skills is significant in years for every one. On the other hand, i belive that in primary years of school childrens do not have to combine school subjects with computer skills. In first place, it will effect not only for their eye vision but also their whole organism. In this ages kids body is becomes suseptible which have tendency to get ill. Gazing to computer will uttely damage their body. For example, recent resourche which conducted by the United Kingdom shows that most of children this children learned better in real life that in virtual one. Computer devices is not essential for a kid to learn from first grade. In conclistion, particular tip of people said that computer devices should be indispensible which school subjects to increase knowlege in this sector. However, i belive that school children do not have to immerse in this major.
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engaged with computer
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devices and
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that computer
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skills
should be
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added
to primary
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subjects
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elementry
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schools
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advocate that
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children
should
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learn
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subjects
itself at
first
years of
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school
.
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people
claimed that computer
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skills
plays vital role in a
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kids
life. They should
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learn
in primary age which boost this
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skill
in adulthood.
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, in the future
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most of employers
will require computer
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skills
to addition diploma it would be
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good
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idea
to
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learn
this
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skill
since childhood with
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school
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subjects
such as reading, writing and mathematics. Computer
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skills
is significant in years for every one.
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belive
that in primary years of
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school
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childrens
do not
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combine
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school
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subjects
with computer
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skills
. In
first
place, it will
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effect
not
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also
their whole organism. In
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this
ages kids body is becomes
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suseptible
which have tendency to
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ill. Gazing to computer will
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damage their body.
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, recent
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which conducted by the United Kingdom
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shows
that most of
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children
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this
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children
learned better in real life that in virtual one. Computer devices is not essential for a kid to
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learn
from
first
grade. In
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conclistion
, particular tip of
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people
said that computer devices should be
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indispensible
which
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school
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subjects
to increase
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knowlege
in this sector.
However
, i
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belive
that
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school
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children
do not
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have to
immerse in this major.

IELTS essay Some people belive that computer skills should learn with school subjects such as reading, writing and math.

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