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Some people believe universities should take the same numbers of students of both genders in every major. I personally think it is quite right.

Some people believe universities should take the same numbers of students of both genders in every major. I personally think it is quite right. ABkAl
Society Encourage men to study specific subject because they believe not only men are more powerful than women but also, they assume male are braver than females. Due to this universities accept boys more than girls in some specific majors such as electronic or mechanic. in fact, in some aspect women are better than men and this belief is completely wrong. I totally disagree. both genders are equal and there is no difference between them also they should have the same chance at universities. As a result of unequal chance, it would be a significant difference between the number of male and female students at universities hence genders who are less will feel lonely and separated from others. In some ways maybe they feel shamed and they do not participate in the classes. For instance, in my university most of the students who study architecture are girls because of this, boys are quiet and shy in the classes. If the number of students were the same, they would have felt better. In conclusion, by setting some rules we can prevent from injustice in addition students will feel more comfortable and they will study harder further more it would be a constructed coemption between genders.
Society Encourage
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to study specific subject
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they believe not
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are more powerful than women
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also
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this
universities accept boys more than girls in
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some
specific majors such as electronic or mechanic.
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aspect women are better than
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men
and this belief is completely
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both
genders are equal and there is no difference between them
also
they should have the same chance at universities.

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of unequal chance, it would be a significant difference between the number of male and female
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students
at universities
hence
genders who are less will feel lonely and separated from others. In
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some
ways maybe they feel
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shamed and
they do not participate in the classes.
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, in my university most of the
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students
who study architecture are girls
because of this
, boys are quiet and shy in the classes. If the number of
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students
were the same, they would have felt better.

In conclusion
, by setting
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some
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rules
we can
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from injustice
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students
will feel more
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comfortable and
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further
more it would be a constructed
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coemption
between genders.
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IELTS essay Some people believe universities should take the same numbers of students of both genders in every major. I personally think it is quite right.

Essay
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3 paragraphs
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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