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In many cities, people are living in bog apartment blocks. Do advantages of this outweigh it's disadvantages.

In many cities, people are living in bog apartment blocks. Do advantages of this outweigh it's disadvantages. PgqB2
Thanks to the modern amenities provided by the high-rise building which enable people to prefer them to detached houses. Even though there are some drawbacks of living in an apartment, the benefits it offers are far more. It plays a significant role in improving the standard of living of habitats living in that particular premises. As most of the condominiums are near to the city centre, people can have instant access to any kind of facilities. Moreover, these buildings comprises people from different backgrounds and social strata. Understanding these aspects enable them to comprehend the cultural norms and living standards of various kinds of people residing in the same stay. And they would try to imitate the feasible ethical norms in their own life, ultimately, enhances their living standards. For example, in a recent research conducted by Queens' University in the UK, it has been reported that the standard of living of people staying in an accommodation is much more higher than the people residing in their own homes in the same city center. Then, the other benefit is that the apartments provide more safety and security to the human life. Due to the fact that such tylrof buildings always have an entrance gate, which restricts the entry of strangers inside. Furthermore, refrain any kind of wrong doings. To illustrate, it has been proved In a research that the people living in the apartments are more secure and away from the offenders. On the contrary, lack of space is the real down side of this accommodation s. As in these building the each flats has its own boundaries and they are structured similarly. Consequently, creates many constraints at the time of get together or any familial ceremony. To exemplify, in cities most of the people prefer to celebrate the special events, outside their home. Owing to the fact that it cannot accommodate large number of people at same time. To conclude, condominiums cater to the need of the people with various facilities at one's door step. Living there is a plausible idea. Hence, the advantages of apartments outshine its disadvantages.
Thanks to the modern amenities provided by the high-rise
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building
which enable
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people
to prefer them to detached
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houses
.
Even though
there are
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some
drawbacks of
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living
in an
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apartment
, the benefits it offers are far more.

It plays a significant role in improving the
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standard
of
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living
of habitats
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living
in that particular premises. As most of the condominiums are near to the city
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centre
,
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people
can have instant access to any kind of facilities.
Moreover
, these
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buildings
comprises
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people
from
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different
backgrounds and social strata. Understanding these aspects enable them to comprehend the cultural norms and
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living
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standards
of various kinds of
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people
residing in the same stay. And they would try to imitate the feasible ethical norms in their
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own
life,
ultimately
, enhances their
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living
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standards
.
For example
, in a recent research conducted by Queens' University in the UK, it has
been reported
that the
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standard
of
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living
of
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people
staying in
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an accommodation
is much
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more higher
than the
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people
residing in their
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own
homes in the same city center. Then, the other benefit is that the
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apartments
provide more safety and security to the human life. Due to the fact that such
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tylrof
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buildings
always have an entrance gate, which restricts the entry of strangers inside.
Furthermore
, refrain any kind of
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wrong
doings. To illustrate, it has
been proved
In
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a research
that the
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people
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living
in the
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apartments
are more secure and away from the offenders.

On the contrary
, lack of space is the real
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down side
of this accommodation s. As in these
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building
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the each
flats has its
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own
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
boundaries and
they
are structured
similarly
.
Consequently
, creates
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many
constraints at the time of
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get
together or any familial ceremony. To exemplify, in cities most of the
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people
prefer to celebrate the special
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events
, outside their home. Owing to the fact that it cannot accommodate large number of
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people
at same time.

To conclude
, condominiums cater to the need of the
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people
with various facilities at one's door step.
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Living
there is a plausible
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idea
.
Hence
, the advantages of
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apartments
outshine its disadvantages.
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IELTS essay In many cities, people are living in bog apartment blocks. Do advantages of this outweigh it's disadvantages.

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