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Before an important exam, do you think it is better to prepare for a long time or only for a few days? Give examples and reasons to support your argument. v.1

Before an important exam, do you think it is better to prepare for a long time or only for a few days? Give examples and reasons to support your argument. v. 1
Nowadays, undoubtedly one of the most important issues of people's being responsible. A group believes that every individual is responsible while the other crowd thinks that the regime should take care of it. Bellow, I will examine both sides of the argument. To be sure, individual activities are playing an influential role in people's behaviour. The first and foremost one is independent. When a person starts to stand on his or her feet and make himself or herself a responsible body, there is no need for other people or even government. One other point is being well-experienced when somebody starts to make himself as someone whom others would love and respect; he would realize that he must do other actions to his personality as before experienced. However, it can be equally argued that politics also plays a pivotal role in people's behaviour. The most significant point to consider is quick report. When the government starts publishing news on TV or in newspapers, the report will be established all over the country in a day. Besides this, children would find an excellent example to follow. In the latest 10 years of human being the report shows that over billions of children are watching TV more than an hour a day. If the politics start to advertise a good character and famous actors or football players and introduce them as a responsible or ethical behaved person or children would learn to do the staff as the TV shows them to be like their exemplar. In summary, I would concede that individuals and government do come with some adverse effects. Despite that fact, benefits created by individuality far outweigh the advantages of government care. Overall, I am convinced the people themselves should decide, and parents should help their children being individual from childhood.
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undoubtedly
one of the most
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important
issues of
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people
's being
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responsible
. A group believes that every
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individual
is
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responsible
while the
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other
crowd
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thinks
that the regime should take care of it. Bellow, I will examine both sides of the argument.

To be sure,
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individual
activities are playing an influential role in
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people
's
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behaviour
. The
first
and foremost one is independent. When a person
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starts
to stand on
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his or her
feet and
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make
himself or herself a
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responsible
body, there is no need for
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other
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people
or even
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government
. One
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other
point is being well-experienced when somebody
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starts
to
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make
himself as someone whom others would
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love
and respect; he would realize that he
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must
do
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other
actions to his personality as
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before
experienced.

However
, it can be
equally
argued that politics
also
plays a pivotal role in
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people
's
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behaviour
. The most significant point to consider is quick report. When the
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government
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starts
publishing news on TV or in newspapers, the report will
be established
all over the country in a day.
Besides
this,
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children
would find an excellent example to follow. In the latest 10 years of human being the report
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shows
that over billions of
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children
are watching TV more than an hour a day. If the politics
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start
to advertise a
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good
character and
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famous
actors or football players and introduce them as a
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responsible
or ethical behaved person or
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children
would learn to do the staff as the TV
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shows
them to be like their exemplar.

In summary, I would concede that
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individuals
and
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government
do
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come
with
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some
adverse effects. Despite that fact, benefits created by individuality far outweigh the advantages of
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government
care.
Overall
, I
am convinced
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
themselves should decide, and parents should
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help
their
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children
being
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individual
from childhood.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Before an important exam, do you think it is better to prepare for a long time or only for a few days? Give examples and reasons to support your argument. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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