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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that university education has highly effects toward our students who are graduated from it. some ideas come from persons, see that these benefits are mainly affected students in their future work, however, others think that graduates from universities appear more beneficial to their societies and individuals. This essay will examine both sides and I will provide an overall opinion. First of all, most of the requirements about any work that the student should be graduated from high university or college especially highly ranked universities. This is because of the quality of learning in these places and the experiences which their students acquire during their life of study, also, the usually interesting about the professors and their training to be more professional has been done periodically. For instance, students from highly ranked universities such as Cambridge or oxford have the ability to apply to any job in the market, while people who did not enter university face a plethora of problems to find places for working. The chief results from studying in the universities that it release persons who have a lot of knowledge and learned to be independent in their own life also they have the ability to do voluntary works which increase the quality life of their country. On the other hand, others argue that the advantages of the university learning appeared only in the communities and individuals. Since the demand on interesting about studying individuals and society are increased, most of universities focus in their target of curriculums to social studies and personality. A lot of examples for that, but in western Europe, they are principally considered that all students in their universities should have the basic in formation about the needs of their communities and also don't forget what each person have to do in his life after graduation. Moreover, social studies and the characteristics of individuals now occupy the top conditions in any work or employment, duo to it can enhance the capacity of work and person who learned these subjects are mainly more useful to his company. To sum up, not only the importance of the university study to find great work but also it affects positively our community and our personality. From this standpoint, governments should put many regulations to make the equilibrium that both students can find better employments and proliferate their individuality and social places.
There is no doubt that
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university
education has
highly
effects toward our
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students
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who
are graduated
from it.
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some
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ideas
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come
from
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persons
,
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see
that these benefits are
mainly
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affected
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students
in their future
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work
,
however
, others
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think
that graduates from
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universities
appear more beneficial to their societies and
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individuals
. This essay will examine both sides and I will provide an
overall
opinion.
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First of all
, most of the requirements about any
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work
that the
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student
should
be graduated
from high
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university
or college
especially
highly
ranked
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universities
. This is
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because
of the quality of learning in these places and the experiences which their
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students
acquire during their
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life
of
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study
,
also
, the
usually
interesting about the professors and their training to be more professional has
been done
periodically
.
For instance
,
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students
from
highly
ranked
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universities
such as Cambridge or oxford have the ability to apply to any job in the market, while
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people
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who
did not enter
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university
face a plethora of problems to find places for working. The chief results from studying in the
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universities
that it release
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persons
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who
have
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a lot of
knowledge and learned to be independent in their
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own
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life
also
they have the ability to do voluntary works which increase the quality
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life
of their country.
On the other hand
, others argue that the advantages of the
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university
learning appeared
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only
in the communities and
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individuals
. Since the demand on interesting about studying
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individuals
and society
are increased
, most of
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universities
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focus in
their target of curriculums to social
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studies
and personality.
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A lot of
examples for that,
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but
in
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western Europe
, they are
principally
considered that all
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students
in their
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universities
should have the basic in formation about the needs of their communities and
also
don't forget what each
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person
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have to
do in his
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life
after graduation.
Moreover
, social
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studies
and the characteristics of
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individuals
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now
occupy the top conditions in any
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work
or employment, duo to it can enhance the capacity of
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work
and
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person
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who
learned these subjects are
mainly
more useful to his
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company
. To sum up, not
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only
the importance of the
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university
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study
to find great
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work
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but
also
it affects
positively
our community and our personality. From this standpoint,
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governments
should put
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many
regulations to
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make
the equilibrium that both
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students
can find better employments and proliferate their individuality and social places.
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IELTS essay Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society.

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