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Some people believe that zoos are vital place to keep animals while others believe that it somehow inhimane.do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that zoos help to preserve wild creatures, while others say that they are inhumane and should be abolished. While the development of breeding programmes contributes to the preservation of endangered species, I believe that the poor conditions that many animals held in captivity are kept in make the existence of zoos unacceptable. On the one hand, there are many projects in existence in zoological parks around the world where species facing extinction have been successfully bred in captivity and their numbers increased substantially. This is important for ensuring the survival of animals under threat from poaching and the destruction of their natural environments. A good example of this is the golden lion tamarin from Brazil which nearly died out because of logging and mining activities which are destroying its habitat. Today, a third of wild golden lion tamarins were raised in captivity. On the other hand, a significant percentage of zoos house their animals in cramped cages with very little space to move around or behave naturally. This can lead to them becoming distressed and depressed as well as suffering physically through lack of exercise. A friend of mine recently visited a wildlife park while on holiday abroad and was very upset to see the lions pacing up and down in a narrow, bare pen and eagles in enclosures so small that they were unable to fly. In conclusion, although zoos do help to safeguard dwindling populations of particular species, the suffering experienced by many captive creatures due to unsuitable living conditions amounts to cruelty and they should not be allowed to exist. (267 words)
Some
people
argue that zoos
help
to preserve wild creatures, while others say that they are inhumane and should
be abolished
. While the development of breeding
programmes
contributes to the preservation of endangered species, I believe that the poor conditions that
many
animals held in captivity are
kept
in
make
the existence of zoos unacceptable. On the one hand, there are
many
projects in existence in zoological parks around the world where species facing extinction have been
successfully
bred in captivity and their numbers increased
substantially
. This is
important
for ensuring the survival of animals under threat from poaching and the destruction of their natural environments. A
good
example of this is the golden lion
tamarin
from Brazil which
nearly
died
out
because
of logging and mining activities which are destroying its habitat.
Today
, a third of wild golden lion
tamarins
were raised
in captivity.
On the other hand
, a significant percentage of zoos
house
their animals in cramped cages with
very
little
space to
move
around or behave
naturally
. This can lead to them becoming distressed and depressed
as well
as suffering
physically
through lack of exercise. A friend of mine recently visited a wildlife park while on holiday abroad and was
very
upset to
see
the lions pacing up and down in a narrow, bare pen and eagles in enclosures
so
small
that they were unable to
fly
.
In conclusion
, although zoos do
help
to safeguard dwindling populations of particular species, the suffering experienced by
many
captive creatures due to unsuitable living conditions amounts to
cruelty and
they should not be
allowed
to exist. (267 words)
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IELTS essay Some people believe that zoos are vital place to keep animals while others believe that it somehow inhimane.

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  American English
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267 words
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