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Some masses believe that youngster should get indulge in unpaid work. While other oppose the view. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Some masses believe that youngster should get indulge in unpaid work. While other oppose the view. DlyW6
Social work is very beneficial for everyone. Because, they can enhance their sheer knowledge about such kind of work. It is believed of some people that teenagers should do more unpaid work, whereas other oppose the view. I agree with this statement. This essay will explain my agree notion in upcoming paragraphs. To begin with the standpoint of individuals can acquire more experience by doing volunteer work as they can increase their knowledge, which is very beneficial for teenagers. Unpaid work experience might be helpful in future prospective as in this way, it helps to make individuals more responsible. It can be seen that in a Foreign Nations, there are a number of youngsters, who are well qualified. They are extremely interested to doing unpaid work. Sometime, they donate their blood to the needy ones in hospital. Therefore, by doing volunteer work, they might be able to secure their future as also they become able to know the value of their work. In addition, volunteer work help to make individuals as good human being, because when a children do unpaid work as they can make their ownself as good citizen, who know the moral and ethical value. They can also make their good behaviour as well as they can increase their knowledge about different work by doing volunteer work. They might be attached to the social work. For instance, in India, there are many learners, who are indulging in such kind of work as they might be increased their Personal qualities like enhance their communication skills. Hence, they might become social or better citizen member of society. In conclusion, by exploring all the aspects, it can be clear that volunteer work is very beneficial. Everyone should need to do more pay less work service because they might be helpful fir their future and they can also enhance their experience.
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should do more unpaid
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, whereas other oppose the view. I
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with this statement. This essay will
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my
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notion in upcoming paragraphs.

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with the standpoint of individuals can acquire more experience by
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volunteer
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work
as they can increase their knowledge, which is
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very
beneficial for
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teenagers
. Unpaid
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experience
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might
be helpful in future prospective as in this way, it
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helps
to
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make
individuals more responsible. It can be
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seen
that in a Foreign Nations, there are a number of youngsters, who are well qualified. They are
extremely
interested to
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doing
unpaid
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work
. Sometime, they donate their blood to the needy ones in hospital.
Therefore
, by
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doing
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volunteer
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work
, they
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might
be able to secure their future as
also
they become able to know the value of their work.

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,
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volunteer
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work
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help
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individuals as
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good
human being,
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when
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a children
do unpaid
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as they can
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their
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ownself
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citizen, who know the moral and ethical value. They can
also
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their
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good
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behaviour
as well
as they can increase their knowledge about
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by
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. They
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be attached
to the social
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.
For instance
, in India, there are
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learners, who are indulging in such kind of
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work
as they
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might
be increased
their Personal qualities like enhance their communication
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skills
.
Hence
, they
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might
become social or better citizen member of society.

In conclusion
, by exploring all the aspects, it can be
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clear
that
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volunteer
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work
is
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very
beneficial. Everyone should need to do more pay less
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work
service
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because
they
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be helpful fir their
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future and
they can
also
enhance their experience.
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IELTS essay Some masses believe that youngster should get indulge in unpaid work. While other oppose the view.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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