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Write about the following topic: Some people believe that young adults are free to choose a job they really want to be in the future. Others, however, think that they should be realistic. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

: Some people believe that young adults are free to choose a job they really want to be in the future. Others, however, think that they should be realistic. KwGO9
There is a hot debate about the choosing job of young generation in the future. I agree that young adults should pick a job they are into; however, I also believe that they should chase a top job. The following essay will firstly discuss in detail it while it will then outline about my personal perspective. On the one hand, why young adults are free to choose a job they really want to be in the future? Firstly, they can do their dream job perfectly consequently they may be rapid promotion. For instance, a person does his dream job, he can use all his knowledge and enthusiasm to complete his duty. Secondly, their lives will be happy without stress. They work things that conform with their talent; therefore, the job will be easy. On the other hand, there are several reasons why people tend to choose a real job that is stable. Firstly, due to the development of society, a stable job helps human beings cover their bills. In life, people have to pay any fees such as rent, electricity bill, daily goods, and so forth. A trendy job with a stable income allows them to make end meets. Furthermore, a realistic job helps life easier for you because you don't have to struggle from this job to other jobs. In conclusion, young adults should carefully when choosing a job in the future. You must consider carefully both benefits and drawback of a job because it leads to many consequences later.
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generation in the future. I
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adults should pick a
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they are into;
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also
believe that they should chase a top
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. The following essay will
firstly
discuss in detail it while it will then outline about my personal perspective.

On the one hand, why
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young
adults are free to choose a
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they
really
want to be in the future?
Firstly
, they can do their dream
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job
perfectly
consequently
they may be rapid promotion.
For instance
, a person does his dream
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, he can
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use
all his knowledge and enthusiasm to complete his duty.
Secondly
, their
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lives
will be happy without
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stress
. They work things that conform with their talent;
therefore
, the
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will be easy.
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, there are several reasons why
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people
tend to choose a real
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that is
stable.
Firstly
, due to the development of society, a stable
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job
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human beings cover their bills. In life,
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, and
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with a stable income
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meets.
Furthermore
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job
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helps
life easier for you
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struggle from this
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to other jobs.

In conclusion
,
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adults should
carefully
when choosing a
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job
in the future. You
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both benefits and drawback of a
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because
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many
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IELTS essay : Some people believe that young adults are free to choose a job they really want to be in the future. Others, however, think that they should be realistic.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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