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Some people believe that women should treated as equal to man when applying for job with Police or the military other think women are less suitable for this kind of job discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that women should treated as equal to man when applying for job with Police or the military other think women are less suitable for this kind of job xpMw
In Modern era, discrimination has been the most heated debate or over the world many things that female should treated same way as a mail while applying for work with the police or they are me never the less dumbbell women are not much preferable for this type of job in my opinion was under heaven equal right to choose their opinion and occupation and people should accept that for development of country. What you will be discussed in following paragraph. To commence with, women officer or soldiers would consider equal on work as it can reduce discrimination and orthodox mentality as well as literacy rate can increase due to inspired by this women employee get good suspect in society other will also encouraged to study and going doing work. For instance, in the Japan most cop and navy are women that is come up with most educated country all over the planet. Consequently, upcoming generation will be educated. Additionally, inferiority will reduce and Nation can be developing to develop faster and easily. On the other side lady employee are least suitable for some kind of work as they are more emotional than men in nature. Hence, a plethora of Profession need physical strength so male are regarded instead of female in those fields. To exemplify, In the Nepal’ record the least file register against split of blood as there are less women cop and politician so legislation are so strict than other countries. Subsequently, decision can be taken accurate and wisely, which reduce conflicts among nation. in conclusion, although men and women both have importance in particular field as the women are more suitable for teacher, doctor, nurse and so on. In contrary, Police, soldier, mechanical and other streams are suitable to a men workers. As per my view, all employees should respect in same manner in whatever profession of their.
In Modern era, discrimination has been the most heated debate or over the world
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many
things that female should
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treated
same way as a mail while applying for
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work
with the
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police or
they are me
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never the less
dumbbell
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women
are not much preferable for this type of job in my opinion was under heaven equal right to choose their opinion and occupation and
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people
should accept that for development of country. What you will
be discussed
in following paragraph.

To commence with,
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women
officer or soldiers would consider equal on
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work
as it can
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reduce
discrimination and orthodox mentality
as well
as literacy rate can increase due to inspired by this
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women
employee
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get
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good
suspect in society
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other
will
also
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encouraged
to study and going doing
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work
.
For instance
, in the Japan most cop and navy are
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women
that is
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come
up with most educated country all over the planet.

Consequently
, upcoming generation will
be educated
.
Additionally
, inferiority will
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reduce
and Nation can be developing to develop faster and
easily
.

On the
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other
side lady employee are least suitable for
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some
kind of
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work
as they are more emotional than
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men
in nature.
Hence
, a plethora of Profession need physical strength
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so
male
are regarded
instead
of female in those fields. To exemplify, In the Nepal’ record the least file register against split of blood as there are
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less
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women
cop and politician
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so
legislation are
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so
strict than
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other
countries.

Subsequently
, decision can
be taken
accurate and
wisely
, which
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reduce
conflicts among nation.

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in
conclusion, although
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men
and
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women
both have importance
in particular
field as the
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women
are more suitable for teacher, doctor, nurse and
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so
on. In contrary, Police, soldier, mechanical and
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other
streams are suitable to a
'man' is the singular form of 'men'. Consider using "man".
men
workers. As per my view, all employees should respect in same manner in whatever profession of their.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that women should treated as equal to man when applying for job with Police or the military other think women are less suitable for this kind of job

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  American English
6 paragraphs
312 words
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