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Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now. A9AL
It is undeniable fact that crime is one of the biggest threat for any nation. It is primary belief of some group of community, our judicial system should take some vital and crucial procecution to prevent crime while, others oppose this school of thought. In subsequent paragraphs, will discuss both the aspects and give my opinion by strong arguments and examples as well. To commence with, There are plethora of causes behind the augmentation of violance. Nowadays, Digital crime is soared with ace of time owing to modern technology. Moreover, It is ardous to catch a digital offenders thus, higher authorities should turn towards some strong punishments. In addition to this, cyber crime should introduce fundamental laws regarding white and black hat hacking. This will leads to decrease the crime rate. To examplify this, after updating hacking laws, America's digital crime rate is nearly 5% less with compare to past. Furthermore, Another major cause behind offence is poverty and starvingness. It was noticed in some undeveloped countries that the crime rate was went up due to basic necessity. Hence, government should look after for these basic needs of communities. On the contrary, Recently, In developed nations crime is being control effortlessly just because of their regulations on violance. However, With compare to undevelop countries, developed nations has a wide range of financial supports and education as well. The citizens of improved regions are mature enough to follow the rules and regulations of their judicial system. For instance, The crime rate in dubai is minimal with compare to africa. To conclued, Both sides have their own significant but in my opinion, this world has more undeveloped nations than caltivated nations thus, judicial system should look after the crime rate and try to decrease in whatever way in which they can.
It is undeniable fact that
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crime
is one of the biggest threat for any
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nation
. It is primary belief of
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some
group of community, our judicial system should take
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some
vital and crucial
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procecution
to
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prevent
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crime
while, others oppose this school of
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thought
. In subsequent paragraphs, will discuss both the aspects and give my opinion by strong arguments and examples
as well
.

To commence with, There are plethora of causes behind the augmentation of
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violance
. Nowadays, Digital
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crime
is soared
with ace of time owing to modern technology.
Moreover
, It is
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ardous
to catch a digital
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offenders
thus
, higher authorities should turn towards
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some
strong punishments.
In addition
to this, cyber
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crime
should
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introduce


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fundamental
laws regarding white and black hat hacking. This will leads to decrease the
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crime
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rate
. To
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examplify
this, after updating hacking laws, America's digital
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crime
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rate
is
nearly
5% less with compare to past.
Furthermore
, Another major cause behind
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offence
is poverty and
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starvingness
. It
was noticed
in
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some
undeveloped countries
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that


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the
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crime
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rate
was
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went
up due to basic necessity.
Hence
,
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government
should look after for these basic needs of communities.

On the contrary
, Recently, In developed
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nations
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crime
is being control
effortlessly
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just
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because
of their regulations on
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violance
.
However
, With compare to
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undevelop
countries, developed
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nations
has a wide range of financial supports and

education
as well
. The citizens of
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improved
regions are mature
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enough
to follow the
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rules
and regulations of their judicial system.
For instance
, The
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crime
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rate
in
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dubai
is minimal with compare to
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africa
.

To
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conclued
, Both sides have their
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own
significant
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but
in my opinion, this world has more undeveloped
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nations
than
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caltivated
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nations
thus
, judicial system should look after the
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crime
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rate
and try to decrease in whatever way in which they can.

IELTS essay Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now.

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