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Some people believe that we should start giving formal education to students at a much earlier age, while others think we should wait until the age of 7. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Discuss and give reasons for your answer v.2

Some people believe that we should start giving formal education to students at a much earlier age, while others think we should wait until the age of 7. with this statement? Discuss and 2
Education is a powerful weapon which we can use to run the world on a progressive track. One of the most controversial issue today relates to that, at what age children should acquire formal education? I completely agree with the given statement, and give reasons for my answer through some examples and assertions in the further piece of essay. The first step to understand that, how can children adapt formal education at early age? Broadly speaking, the prominent reason is new generation children. It has been seen that nowadays children have sharp brains and adapt things rapidly. Similarly, there are many kids which learn different things at early age with the help of internet. Children of new generation are extremely smart, compared to children earlier, they are acquiring knowledge instantly with the help of new advancement. A good illustration is, Finland education system is currently the number one education system and they has also implemented education standard at early age of 4. As a result, it is clear that adapting knowledge at early age is easy for kids. The second foremost reason is safety. If children will start studying at early age than it will be easy for parents to keep there child away from extra activities such as using computer for long time or playing games on them which can be harmful to them at early age. Meanwhile, these activities can also cause certain disease as well. In addition, sending children to school will not vanish the total time for their playing because they provide effective playing time for children. Moreover, in school children can both study and play at perfect time which will be highly beneficial for them. In conclusion, It depends on the child that he or she is able to learn distinct things at early age or not and the authorities can make stringent laws for formal education of children in every country so there will be no more arguments that children should go to school either at early age or at the age of 7.
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. One of the most controversial issue
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relates to that, at what
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age
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children
should acquire formal
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education
? I completely
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agree
with the
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statement, and give reasons for my answer through
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some
examples and assertions in the
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piece of essay.

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first
step to understand that, how can
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children
adapt formal
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education
at
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early
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age
?
Broadly
speaking, the prominent reason is new generation
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children
. It has been
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seen
that nowadays
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children
have sharp brains and adapt things
rapidly
.
Similarly
, there are
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many
kids which learn
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different
things at
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early
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age
with the
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help
of internet.
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of new generation are
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earlier, they are acquiring knowledge
instantly
with the
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help
of new advancement. A
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illustration is, Finland
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system is
currently
the number one
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education
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also
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standard at
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, it is
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that adapting knowledge at
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early
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is easy for kids.

The second foremost reason is safety. If
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children
will
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start
studying at
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early
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age
than it will be easy for parents to
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keep
there child away from extra activities such as using computer for long
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time
or playing games on them which can be harmful to them at
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early
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age
. Meanwhile, these activities can
also
cause certain disease
as well
.
In addition
, sending
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children
to school will not vanish the total
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for their playing
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because
they provide effective playing
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for
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.
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, in school
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children
can both study and play at perfect
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time
which will be
highly
beneficial for them.

In conclusion
, It depends on the child that he or she is able to learn distinct things at
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early
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age
or not and the authorities can
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make
stringent laws for formal
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education
of
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children
in every country
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so
there will be no more arguments that
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children
should go to school either at
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early
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age
or at the
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age
of 7.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that we should start giving formal education to students at a much earlier age, while others think we should wait until the age of 7. with this statement? Discuss and 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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