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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.4

Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. v. 4
Although, it is sometimes thought that things from the past have no benefit for us living today, other people believe that history is indispensable if we are to fully comprehend the purpose of our existence. In my opinion, history contains important details which could help us avoid past mistakes and look ahead into the future. On the one hand, some people think that technology has outdated most of the things normally practiced years ago. With scientific advancement, people now can peform a lot of activities with ease and to a degree that was previously thought impossible as there are better and more sophisticated ways of doing things. This has made learning of the old ways futile, with no relevance in today's world. For example, learning how a horse moves, which was the predominant means of transportation years ago, has no impact on learning to drive a car, a modern means of transportation. On the other hand, others believe that history contains important details and information to help us comprehend the purpose of our existence and I agree. We as humans, generally have always had the same values and purpose which has been passed on from generation to generation. Understanding how these values helped older generations or the consequences of drifting from their purpose would help us today to build a better society and avoid dangers. For instance, understanding the dangers of greed and the troubles earlier generations went through to rid themselves off it helped the Japanese to be more disciplined and tolerant, thus building a more constructive society. In conclusion, although, thoughts vary as to the importance of history, It contains indispensable information for us to build a better society today.
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practiced years ago. With scientific advancement,
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and to a degree that was previously
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impossible as there are better and more sophisticated ways of doing things. This has made learning of the
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ways futile, with no relevance in
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's world.
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, which was the predominant means of transportation years ago, has no impact on learning to drive a car, a modern means of transportation.

On the other hand
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us comprehend the
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of our existence and I
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. We as humans,
generally
have always had the same values and
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purpose
which has
been passed
on from generation to generation. Understanding how these values
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helped
older generations or the consequences of drifting from their
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purpose
would
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help
us
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to build a better society and avoid
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dangers
.
For instance
, understanding the
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dangers
of greed and the troubles earlier generations went through to rid themselves off it
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helped
the Japanese to be more disciplined and tolerant,
thus
building a more constructive society.

In conclusion
, although, thoughts vary as to the importance of
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history
, It contains indispensable information for us to build a better society
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.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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