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Some people believe that watching TV is good and makes peoples life enjoyable while others believe it’s just a wastage of time ?To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that watching TV is good and makes peoples life enjoyable while others believe it’s just a wastage of time? 3LDOX
There is significant impact of television over the people from last few decades, therefore, a debate between the people increasing that watching television is a good source of entertainment where other believes it’s just a time waste activity. While I strongly convinced with former one statement and reason will be Critiqued in subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, let is unfurl some reasons why watching television is better and enjoyable. First and foremost, TV plays part and parcel role in humans life, it is not only the source of entertainment but also strengthen the bond between people as family members love to watch the television together which spread happiness among them. Not only this, television is also a source of journal knowledge as it provide the current affairs which are doing all over around the world through news channels. For instance, last year a live broadcasting shown by Zee media on the United nation about global climate change which is seen by more than 165 countries. Moving further, watching television also a stressbuster activity not only for the children but also for the adults, as people can reduce their stress from mind which happened due to over workload in this ultra modern era. Last but not least, the awareness of people increased by watching television because of TV is a way of watching stories which are really based on real stories, thus, people can be prepared before facing any difficulties. It would be reiterated, although a lot of people consider television as a idiot box but I firmly believe that television has only positive impact on individuals along with source of entertainment instead of considering it wastage of time.
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from last few decades,
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good
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source
of entertainment where other

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a time waste activity. While I
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convinced with former one statement and
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reason


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is better and enjoyable.
First
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and


foremost, TV plays part and parcel role in humans life, it is not
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source
of entertainment
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strengthen the bond between
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people
as family members
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love
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watch
the
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together which

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spread
happiness among them. Not
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is
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of journal knowledge as
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it


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provide
the
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current
affairs which are doing all over around the world through news channels. For

instance, last year a
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live
broadcasting shown by
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Zee
media on the United nation about global climate

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change
which is
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seen
by more than 165 countries.

Moving
further
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also
a
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stressbuster
activity not
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for the children
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also
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adults, as
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people
can
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from mind which happened due to over workload in this ultra

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modern
era. Last
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not least, the awareness of
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increased by watching
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television
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of
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TV


is a way of watching stories which are
really
based on real stories,
thus
,
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can
be prepared
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facing
any difficulties.

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be reiterated
, although
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consider
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a
idiot box
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firmly
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television has
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positive
impact on individuals along with
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source
of entertainment
instead
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considering
it wastage of time.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that watching TV is good and makes peoples life enjoyable while others believe it’s just a wastage of time?

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  American English
19 paragraphs
278 words
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