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Some people believe that watching television is good for entertaining and educations, while others says that is bad for health and family life

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A number of people of the world have developed a habbit regarding watch the television. At the current moment, every communities work hardly and they spend their lesure time with television. However, a multitude persons think that small screen is better for entertaining and studies. Another one supposes that it is worst for fitness and life of home. Although, I believe that television has number of advantages and disadvantages, we should manage it for success our life. Today, television provide most programme for entertaining and education. Many of the students and adults use it for waste their time. The community can watch various kind of programme by a multitude channels. For example, most of the time, I follow the Teen Voice in Sirasa TV and Derana dream star. My sister watches cartoon in the evening. As well as, my mother is prefer to cooking competition in India and all my family members fans to watch numerous film in every weekend. Actually, my elder sister usually adopts the screen for taking information their studies by education programme and here BBC news and English business meeting series for improving her English knowledge. Although, most of the people change their life from physical excrises to watching television. Consequently, they have faced health problem and broken their relationship bond. For instance, my sister has not done any fitness activities due to she watch the television every time. She was high weight pertion with blood suger, pressure and colostrol. Not only than, my brother usually show the lot of programme and he do not have any chatting with other family members. According to my point of view and above facts, I think that television is major item for entertain and educational. But we should use to our life appropriately. Definitely, all the people must concern their health and safe relationship between family members. We can use number of method for completing fun activities and studies. But better health and family bond can be create only us. hence, we should think to allocate time for fitness activities and increment relationship between each other.
A number of
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of the world have developed a
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habbit
regarding
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watch
the
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television
. At the
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current
moment, every
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communities
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work hardly
and they spend their
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lesure
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time
with
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television
.
However
, a multitude persons
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think
that
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small
screen is better for entertaining and studies. Another one supposes that it is worst for fitness and life of home. Although, I believe that
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television
has number of advantages and disadvantages, we should manage it for success our life.

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Today
,
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television
provide most
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programme
for entertaining and education.
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Many
of the students and adults
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use
it for waste their
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time
. The community can
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watch
various kind of
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programme
by a multitude channels.
For example
, most of the
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time
, I follow the Teen Voice in
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Sirasa
TV and
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Derana
dream star. My sister
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watches
cartoon in the evening.
As well
as, my mother is
Consider using a past participle here: "preferred".
prefer
to
Did you mean "cook"?
cooking
competition in India and all my
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family
members fans to
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watch
numerous film in every weekend. Actually, my elder sister
usually
adopts the screen for taking information their studies by education
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programme
and here BBC news and English business meeting series for improving her English knowledge.

“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
, most of the
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people
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change
their
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life
from physical
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excrises
to watching
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television
.
Consequently
, they have faced health problem and broken their relationship bond.
For instance
, my sister has not done any fitness activities due to she
The pronoun 'she' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "watches", "watched".
watch
the
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television
every
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time
. She was high weight
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pertion
with blood
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suger
, pressure and
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colostrol
. Not
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only
than, my brother
usually
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show
the lot of
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programme and
he
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do
not have any chatting with other
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family
members.

According to my point of view and above facts, I
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think
that
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television
is major item for entertain and educational.
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But
we should
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use
to our life
appropriately
. Definitely, all the
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people
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must
concern their health and safe relationship between
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family
members. We can
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use
number of method for completing fun activities and studies.
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But
better health and
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family
bond can be
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create
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only
us.
hence
, we should
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think
to allocate
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time
for fitness activities and increment relationship between each other.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that watching television is good for entertaining and educations, while others says that is bad for health and family life

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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