Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that host country should welcome cultural differences

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that host country should welcome cultural differences 0qmq
Some think that tourist to other countries ought to follow customs and behaviour of local people, other people disagree and believe that cultural differences are suppose to be welcomed by host country. I am going to discuss both standpoints before stating my own opinion. Some people believe that local customs and behaviour ought to be followed by travellers. It is true because when people go to another country, they confront some diffuculties related to vurbally interaction. If visitors know about local culture and behaviour of people. They can communicate with inhabitants successfully knowing cultire and behaviour is very important, for instance, visitors know that what kind of food inhabitants love, How status they call each other and so on. In addition to that, It is not only usefull for visitors but also, for the host country firstly, the host country can expand its own culture around the world Secondly, it is very great in terms of economy because a number of travellers increase significantly. Whey visitors come to the country they usually buy cultural souneoir, clothes. However, some think that the host countries are suppose to follow cultural differencess. Some bellieve and including me. It iso‘not true. First of all, It effects young generation because children's upbrings and backgrounds are completly different so, they may reject some changes in the culture. to sum up, it is obvious that the host country should not welcome cultural differencess if visitors learn local customs they can enjoy and get on well local inhabitants successfully.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that tourist to other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
ought to follow customs and
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
disagree and believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultural
differences are
Probably you should use a past participle here: "supposed".
suppose
to
be welcomed
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
host
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
. I am going to discuss both standpoints
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
stating my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
opinion.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
customs and
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
ought to
be followed
by
Possible spelling mistake found.
travellers
. It is true
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
when
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
go to another
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
, they confront
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Possible spelling mistake found.
diffuculties
related to
Possible spelling mistake found.
vurbally
interaction. If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitors
know about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
culture and
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. They can communicate with inhabitants
successfully
knowing
Possible spelling mistake found.
cultire
and
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
,
for instance
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitors
know that what kind of food inhabitants
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
, How status they call each other and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.
In addition
to that, It is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
Possible spelling mistake found.
usefull
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitors
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
, for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
host
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
firstly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
host
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
can expand its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
culture around the world
Secondly
, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
great in terms of economy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
a number of
Possible spelling mistake found.
travellers
increase
significantly
. Whey
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitors
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
they
usually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultural
Possible spelling mistake found.
souneoir
, clothes.

However
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
host
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
are
Consider using a past participle here: "supposed".
suppose
to follow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultural
Possible spelling mistake found.
differencess
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
Possible spelling mistake found.
bellieve
and including me. It
Possible spelling mistake found.
iso
‘not true.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, It effects young generation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
children's
Possible spelling mistake found.
upbrings
and backgrounds are
Possible spelling mistake found.
completly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, they may reject
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in the culture.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
to
sum up, it is obvious that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
host
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
should not welcome
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultural
Possible spelling mistake found.
differencess
if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visitors
learn
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
customs they can enjoy and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
on well
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
inhabitants
successfully
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that host country should welcome cultural differences

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts