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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT UNPAID COMMUNITY SERVICE SHOULD BE A COMPULSORY PART OF HIGHSCHOOL PROGRAMS. to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT UNPAID COMMUNITY SERVICE SHOULD BE A COMPULSORY PART OF HIGHSCHOOL PROGRAMS. g5WjL
Many citizens do not consider that ad honorem community service should be an obligatory subject in school. In my view all teenagers should work for their town, this could be as easy as cleaning up the neighbourhood, teaching sports for young kids or reading books for the elderly at nursing homes. Before graduation volunteer jobs should be compulsory but despite not getting paid they should certainly receive credits and positive references for entering the university. From a social point of view, working for others as a volunteer can make you interact and gain new friends as you do so. Organizing events for charity institutions or sports activities for kids would prepare teenagers for adult life which is practically a coordinated and demanding tight schedule. Helping your neighbour can be very fulfiling and this actions can also cure and prevent teenager depression, drugadiction, alcoholism and can even get kids away from stealing and commiting crimes. Ir is for sure community service consume studying and playing hours but it also teaches time management and socializing skills. When my kids were 12 and 14 they used to spend lots of hours playing video games, chatting with friends online and eating junk food. They were helpful, lovely kids but they had become couch potatoes and I did not know what to do to help. After reading and investigating for some weeks I proposed the school principal a list of activities for their advanced classes to do. I wanted to help not only my boys but also the rest of their classmates. I organized small jobs such as, reading books for senior neighbours, gardening activities downtown, joining the red cross and the school accepted the proposal and since then many kids have earned credits and skills not only for university but mainly for adulthood. As a teenager specialist, as I consider myself after raising two now social and adapted to community grownups, community service is a rock in our personality construction, it is needed to grow healthy and being able to adapt and be part of a community full of other to interact so it should be compulsory at highschool in every school of the world.
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community
service should be an obligatory subject in
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school
. In my view all
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teenagers
should work for their town, this could be as easy as cleaning up the
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neighbourhood
, teaching sports for young
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kids
or reading books for the elderly at nursing homes.
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Before
graduation volunteer jobs should be compulsory
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but
despite not getting paid they should
certainly
receive credits and
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positive
references for entering the university.

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make
you interact and gain new friends as you do
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so
. Organizing
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events
for charity institutions or sports activities for
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kids
would prepare
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teenagers
for adult life which is
practically
a coordinated and demanding tight schedule. Helping your
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neighbour
can be
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very
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fulfiling
and this actions can
also
cure and
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prevent
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teenager
depression,
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drugadiction
, alcoholism and can even
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get
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kids
away from stealing and
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commiting
crimes. Ir is for sure
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community
service consume studying and playing hours
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but
it
also
teaches time management and socializing
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skills
.

When my
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kids
were 12 and 14 they
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used
to spend lots of hours playing video games, chatting with friends online and eating junk food. They were helpful, lovely
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kids
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but
they had become couch potatoes and I did not know what to do to
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help
. After reading and investigating for
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some
weeks I proposed the
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school
principal a list of activities for their advanced classes to do. I wanted to
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help
not
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only
my boys
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but
also
the rest of their classmates. I organized
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small
jobs such as, reading books for senior
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neighbours
, gardening activities downtown, joining the red cross and the
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school
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accepted
the proposal and since then
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many
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kids
have earned credits and
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skills
not
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only
for university
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but
mainly
for adulthood.

As a
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teenager
specialist, as I consider myself after raising two
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now
social and adapted to
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community
grownups,
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community
service is a rock in our personality construction, it
is needed
to grow healthy and being able to adapt and be part of a
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community
full of other to interact
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so
it should be compulsory at
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highschool
in every
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school
of the world.
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IELTS essay SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT UNPAID COMMUNITY SERVICE SHOULD BE A COMPULSORY PART OF HIGHSCHOOL PROGRAMS.

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  American English
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361 words
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