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Some people believe that toys should educational

Some people believe that toys should educational WGMne

Toys are believed to be educational as well as fun. I totally agree with this statement. First of all, due to the reality there are a large number of toys that are too violent for children to play, especially from a young age. It not only causes a bad effect on children during playing, they may poke their eyes or be scratched. But it also made a long-term effect on themself and surrounding. Such as when they used to play with a plastic gun when they were a child, so when they grow up they may use it like a toy, shooting everyone around. Secondly, in my opinion children should be educated as early as their parents can. Because when they were just a kid they did not know anything, parents had better start teaching them from the small one like be polite, or anything.

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