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World without technology.

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A lot of people say, "The world is better without technology. " This is mostly said by the elderly. Nowadays, there is technology everywhere in the world. For example: in ordering food, in business, in the political relations of states, and even in the education system. The world is developing so fast now. We can't deny it. Even money is slowly disappearing and plastic cards are being used. My opinion on this problem is that almost everyone now knows that technology is mainly good on the phone and computers and on the internet people are sitting at work, but most people use these techniques to spend time. This is definitely bad.
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disappearing and plastic cards are being
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. My opinion on this problem is that almost everyone
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knows that technology is
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good
on the phone and computers and on the internet
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are sitting at work,
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these techniques to spend time. This is definitely
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IELTS essay World without technology.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
111 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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