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Some people believe that there will be a reduction in Air travel in the future. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.4

Some people believe that there will be a reduction in Air travel in the future. v. 4
In recent decades, many researchers have studied the importance of air travel in the future. Indeed, to my mind, there is now a convincing evidence that air transportation will be less preferred. In this essay, I shall examine how research on the increasing costs of airline tickets and plane trustworthiness supports this view. To begin with, the prices for airline tickets have been rising. This is because the demand of customers is not able to be met with a limited number of air travel. For example, a recent Cambridge study showed that plane production cannot be maintained the demand of airlines due to the lack of manufacturing technologies. Therefore, it is a clear case that airline tickets are quite expensive owing to the shortage in the number of available planes and seats for commercial aviation. Secondly, safety concerns regarding air travel have been increasing for many decades. This is because there have been several ill-fated plane disasters happened annually. For instance, a study by Oxford found that 10 out of every 100 flights results in a deadly accident due to the fatal technological errors in the aeroplane industry. Thus, it is certainly the case that safety issues are attributed to clients’ preferences negatively on air travel. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the notion that reducing an airline travel option will be less chosen by the public. In the next decades, we will obviously see that the great deal of people will choose ground transportation instead of planes.
In recent decades,
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many
researchers have studied the importance of
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air
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travel
in the future.
Indeed
, to my mind, there is
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now
a convincing evidence that
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air
transportation will be less preferred. In this essay, I shall examine how research on the increasing costs of airline tickets and
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plane
trustworthiness supports this view.

To
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begin
with, the prices for airline tickets have been rising. This is
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because
the demand of customers is not able to
be met
with a limited number of
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air
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travel
.
For example
, a recent Cambridge study
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showed
that
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plane
production cannot
be maintained
the demand of airlines due to the lack of manufacturing technologies.
Therefore
, it is a
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clear
case that airline tickets are quite expensive owing to the shortage in the number of available
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planes
and seats for commercial aviation.

Secondly
, safety concerns regarding
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air
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travel
have been increasing for
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many
decades. This is
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because
there have been several ill-fated
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plane
disasters happened
annually
.
For instance
, a study by Oxford found that 10 out of every 100 flights results in a deadly accident due to the fatal technological errors in the
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aeroplane
industry.
Thus
, it is
certainly
the case that safety issues
are attributed
to clients’ preferences
negatively
on
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air
travel.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
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agree
with the notion that reducing an airline
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travel
option will be less chosen by the public. In the
next
decades, we will
obviously
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see
that the great deal of
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people
will choose ground transportation
instead
of
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planes
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there will be a reduction in Air travel in the future. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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