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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.3

People have different views about whether or not punishments for crimes should be fixed. Although there are some advantages of fixed punishments, I would argue that it is better to judge each crime individually. There are some good arguments for having one punishment for each crime. This system ensures that each member of society knows and understands the consequences of committing any crime. It is a fair system, and it leaves people with no doubt that breaking the law is not tolerated. At the same time, it is much easier for judges and lawyers when there is a clear rule dictating how each offender should be sentenced. For example, if someone is found guilty of stealing, the judge will simply follow the rules and apply the appropriate punishment. Despite the above arguments, I believe that the context of any criminal act should be taken into account when sentencing an offender. This means that the judge should consider the details of each particular case before deciding on the appropriate punishment. For example, a person who steals something from a shop for the first time should not be treated in the same way as a repeat offender who has been caught shoplifting many times before. It would be sensible to give the first-time offender a small punishment, such as a fine, while the repeat offender may be sent to prison. In conclusion, it seems to me that a mature and humane legal system would be flexible rather than fixed in terms of how decisions about punishments are made.
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whether or not
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. Although there are
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some
advantages of
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fixed
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punishments
, I would argue that it is better to
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judge
each
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crime
individually
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some
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good
arguments for having one
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punishment
for each
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crime
. This system ensures that each member of society knows and understands the consequences of committing any
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crime
. It is a
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fair
system, and it
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leaves
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people
with no doubt that breaking the law is not tolerated. At the same time, it is much easier for
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judges
and lawyers when there is a
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clear
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rule
dictating how each
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offender
should
be sentenced
.
For example
, if someone
is found
guilty of stealing, the
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judge
will
simply
follow the
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rules
and apply the appropriate punishment.

Despite the above arguments, I believe that the context of any criminal act should
be taken
into account when sentencing an
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offender
. This means that the
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judge
should consider the
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details
of each particular case
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before
deciding on the appropriate
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punishment
.
For example
, a person who steals something from a shop for the
first
time should not
be treated
in the same way
as a repeat
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offender
who has
been caught
shoplifting
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many
times
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before
. It would be sensible to give the
first
-time
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offender
a
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small
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punishment
, such as a fine, while the repeat
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offender
may be
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sent
to prison.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that a mature and humane legal system would be flexible
rather
than
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fixed
in terms of how decisions about
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punishments
are made
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.

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