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Some people believe that the public health would greatly be improved if new laws are made by government about people's nutrition and food choices. Others argue that it is a matter people's responsibility. and their have their own choices. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, people are given priority to their heath. Personal and public health are tightly related to food choices. While several people believe that the government will regulate nutrition to improve public wellness, others argue that it will be people’s the decision whether to pursue a healthy diet or not. This essay will discuss both points of view and explain why the authorities will not control the types of food people can buy.
Nowadays,
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priority to their heath. Personal and public health are
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related to food choices. While several
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believe that the
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government
will regulate nutrition to
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improve
public wellness, others argue that it will be
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people’s
the decision whether to pursue a healthy diet or not. This essay will discuss both points of view and
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explain
why the authorities will not control the types of food
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the public health would greatly be improved if new laws are made by government about people's nutrition and food choices. Others argue that it is a matter people's responsibility. and their have their own choices.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
72 words
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