Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by legalising all drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Illegal drugs have become a worldwide problem in modern day society. The trading of drugs is widespread in nearly all countries and the number of people consuming drugs worldwide is high. It has been suggested simply to legalise all recreational drugs to solve the problems associated with them. I personally agree partially with this proposal, because I can see many advantages, yet also many disadvantages. One positive aspect of legalising these drugs would be that the number of criminal activities committed to obtain them would decrease. Fewer people would therefore be imprisoned and have a criminal history that prevents them from progressing in life. Additionally, essential police resources would be freed up and devoted to other areas. Finally, high taxes could be imposed on the legal product, allowing governments to have better resources to improve the infrastructure of their countries. Although legalising all illegal drugs could result in several positive effects, there are many negative effects that could be possible. As a result of the legalisation, I personally believe that it would become acceptable to use drugs and people would no longer pay attention to the damage that drugs cause. Schools might no longer educate teenagers and adolescents about the negative effects drugs have on people, resulting in more teenagers experimenting with them, as they would believe that this is a normal aspect of life. This would result in a higher number of drug addicts and potentially in more deaths, because it would be easier to obtain a large amount of illegal drugs and therefore the chances of overdosing would also increase. In conclusion, I partially agree with the proposed action. Nonetheless, I think that an age restriction should be placed on drug use, as teenagers and adolescents could easily become addicted if all illegal drugs are legalised. This group of people is highly at risk of becoming addicted and potentially dying as a result of drug use and therefore should only be allowed to consume drugs after reaching a certain age.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Illegal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
have become a worldwide problem in modern day society. The trading of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
is widespread in
nearly
all countries and the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
consuming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
worldwide is high. It has
been suggested
simply
to
Possible spelling mistake. ‘legalise’ is British English.
legalise
all recreational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
to solve the problems associated with them. I
personally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
partially
with this proposal,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
advantages,
yet
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
disadvantages.

One
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
aspect of
Possible spelling mistake. ‘legalising’ is British English.
legalising
these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
would be that the number of criminal activities committed to obtain them would decrease. Fewer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
would
therefore
be imprisoned
and have a criminal history that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevents
them from progressing in life.
Additionally
, essential police resources would
be freed
up and devoted to other areas.
Finally
, high taxes could
be imposed
on the legal product, allowing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
to have better resources to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the infrastructure of their countries.

Although
Possible spelling mistake. ‘legalising’ is British English.
legalising
all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
illegal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
could
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
result
in several
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effects, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects that could be possible. As a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
result
of the
Possible spelling mistake. ‘legalisation’ is British English.
legalisation
, I
personally
believe that it would become acceptable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
would no longer pay attention to the damage that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
cause. Schools might no longer educate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
and adolescents about the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
have on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, resulting in more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
experimenting with them, as they would believe that this is a normal aspect of life. This would
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
result
in a higher number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drug
addicts and
potentially
in more deaths,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it would be easier to obtain a large amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
illegal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
and
therefore
the chances of overdosing would
also
increase.

In conclusion
, I
partially
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the proposed action. Nonetheless, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that an age restriction should
be placed
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drug
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
, as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
and adolescents could
easily
become addicted if all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
illegal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
are
Possible spelling mistake. ‘legalised’ is British English.
legalised
. This group of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
is
highly
at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of becoming addicted and
potentially
dying as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
result
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drug
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
and
therefore
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to consume
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
after reaching a certain age.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people believe that the problem of illegal drugs can be solved by legalising all drugs. with this?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts