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Some people believe that the government spends too much money on the arts and that it should spend more on other things. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Some people believe that the government spends too much money on the arts and that it should spend more on other things. GQEe
In any country, some people feel the government uses its funds on developing arts in the country, rather than things, which need more attention. I completely agree with this point of view, and feel that government should use the money more appropriately. It has been observed that politicians make budget spending decisions based on their selfish motives without thinking about the actual benefits to the public. Millions of dollars are allocated on development of structures that do not have any practical value. On such example is spending made on erecting huge statues of famous personalities to attract tourists. To make these pieces of arts unique, extra large and strong, government has to use a number of resources. Since it does not create any real value to the public in terms of usage, I feel it a waste of money. There are projects where huge sums of money are employed to resurrect old ruins and sites, which are considered as lost arts. Large teams work on preserving these places, which have lost its ability to create value or provide any new information. Using the same money in redevelopment and building homes for the poor will prove to be beneficial. Not only housing, but also, this money can also be routed for free medical benefits and free education for the sector of population who cannot afford it. Art is vital, but more important are the underprivileged people who are in need of support. I strongly believe, if government uses its revenue for their future rather than arts, the world will be a happier place.
In any country,
some
people
feel the
government
uses
its funds on developing
arts
in the country,
rather
than things, which need more attention. I completely
agree
with this point of view, and feel that
government
should
use
the
money
more
appropriately
.

It has
been observed
that politicians
make
budget spending decisions based on their selfish motives without thinking about the actual benefits to the public. Millions of dollars
are allocated
on development of structures that do not have any practical value. On such example is spending made on erecting huge statues of
famous
personalities to attract tourists. To
make
these pieces of
arts
unique, extra large and strong,
government
has to
use
a number of resources. Since it does not create any real value to the public in terms of usage, I feel it a waste of money.

There are projects where huge sums of
money
are employed
to resurrect
old
ruins and sites, which
are considered
as lost
arts
. Large teams work on preserving these places, which have lost its ability to create value or provide any new information. Using the same
money
in redevelopment and building homes for the poor will prove to be beneficial. Not
only
housing,
but
also
, this
money
can
also
be routed
for free medical benefits and free education for the sector of population who cannot afford it.

Art is vital,
but
more
important
are the underprivileged
people
who are in need of support. I
strongly
believe, if
government
uses
its revenue for their future
rather
than
arts
, the world will be a happier place.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the government spends too much money on the arts and that it should spend more on other things.

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