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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT THE EXTINCTION OF ANIMAL SPECIES IS A NATURAL PROCESS AND HUMAN SHOULD NOT INTERVENE DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE OR DISAGREE

SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT THE EXTINCTION OF ANIMAL SPECIES IS A NATURAL PROCESS AND HUMAN SHOULD NOT INTERVENE OR DISAGREE 7JVMX
Animal extension is a process that is natural. in today's world humans accept this fact that disappearance of animal species is a natural process that nature does automatically and women should try and not interfere in such a natural processes. To a greater extent I do agree with this statement. Firstly, some processes of nature should never be disturbed and taken for granted. animals species do become rare after a certain period of time but due to the humans interference, they got disappeared within a short span only. as an illustration animal like rhinoceros and giant tortoise, recently got when is because of humans hunting, as some people are fond of animal be so in order to feed their stomach they kill animals. Another points to consider is the life of these rare animal species and the power of nature. animal extortion and trafficking have also increased over a period of time leading ets2 management of animals. for instance, that tooth of an elephant and nail of a lion, is sold in black market at a very high prices coma which are usually obtained by killing these animals and selling their parts for the need of money which according to me is totally wrong and should be prevented. To conclude, life of every animal on the planet earth is precious a human for only the sake of money should not torture and kill this business animals and leave it to the mother Earth's nature for their extension. we should stay away from the changes that nature evolves with time.
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in
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today
's world
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humans
accept this fact that disappearance of
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animal
species is a natural
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process
that
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nature
does
automatically
and women should
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try and
not interfere in such a natural
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processes
. To a greater extent I do
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agree
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,
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some
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processes
of
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should never
be disturbed
and taken for granted.
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animals
species do become rare after a certain period of time
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but
due to the
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humans
interference, they
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got
disappeared within a short span
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an illustration
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animal
like rhinoceros and giant tortoise, recently
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got
when is
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hunting, as
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people
are fond of
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be
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in order to feed their stomach they kill animals.

Another points to consider is the life of these rare
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animal
species and the power of
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nature
.
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animal
extortion and trafficking have
also
increased over a period of time leading ets2 management of
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animals
.
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for
instance, that tooth of an elephant and nail of a lion,
is sold
in black market at a
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very
high prices coma which are
usually
obtained by killing these
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animals
and selling their parts for the need of money which according to me is
totally
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wrong
and should be
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prevented
.

To conclude
, life of every
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animal
on the planet earth is precious a
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human
for
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only
the sake of money should not torture and kill this business
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animals
and
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leave
it to the mother Earth's
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nature
for their extension.
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we
should stay away from the
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changes
that
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nature
evolves with time.
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IELTS essay SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT THE EXTINCTION OF ANIMAL SPECIES IS A NATURAL PROCESS AND HUMAN SHOULD NOT INTERVENE OR DISAGREE

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