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Levels in juvenile crime are increasing rapidly in the most cities around the world. Give reasons of your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Levels in juvenile crime are increasing rapidly in the most cities around the world. Give reasons of your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. 0nQxn
It is irrefutable that today's crime rate at peak point murder, kidnapping, rapes and robberies are the norm of the day. However, juvenile delinquency are hiked significantly in the various unban areas around the globe. This essay will look at the core reasons for this and purpose a number of solid solutions. To embark on, by looking at the one of main causes of this problem is that in today's time joint families disintegrated into nuclear families. Moreover, these days a tread of dual earning both parents work as the result children remains home unattended with no supervision and there are possibilities to go in bad company. For instance in a nuclear family a child is not properly supervised due to less number of family members a child grown up with missing of moral values and education in curriculum. Another problem is that the youngsters use various kinds of media such as internet, television and watching movies among others the children are immature and encouraged by the methods of crime which shown on movies and more envied to hero and heroines additional there is desire today for “Flashy life style” and in that circumstances some children take the shortcuts thus other factors play a much bigger role in diverting the child towards delinquency. To conclude, as the disintegration of joint family, media along with moral values and following into bad company increases this problem. The need of hour is to consult about erring children and equipping them with moral values. Furthermore, both the parents should adjust their work time in such a way that at least one parent is with the child and also we can adopt America system the 'Adopt a grand parent' which can help to enable a passing on the values. Hammering on the last nail. I am inclined to think that if the whole of the society-take collective steps than the stigma of juvenile delinquency will be washed away.
It is irrefutable that
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today
's crime rate at peak point murder, kidnapping, rapes and robberies are the norm of the day.
However
, juvenile delinquency
are hiked
significantly
in the various unban areas around the globe. This essay will look at the core reasons for this and purpose a number of solid solutions.

To embark on, by looking at the one of main causes of this problem is that in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
's time joint
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families
disintegrated into nuclear
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families
.
Moreover
, these days a tread of dual earning both parents work as the result
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children
remains home unattended with no supervision and there are possibilities to go in
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bad
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company
.
For instance
in a nuclear
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family
a
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child
is not
properly
supervised due to less number of
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family
members a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
grown up with missing of moral values and education in curriculum.

Another problem is that the youngsters
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use
various kinds of media such as internet, television and watching movies among others the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are immature and encouraged by the methods of crime which shown on movies and more envied to hero and heroines additional there is desire
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today
for “Flashy life style” and in that circumstances
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some
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children
take the shortcuts
thus
other factors play a much bigger role in diverting the
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child
towards delinquency.

To conclude
, as the disintegration of joint
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
, media along with moral values and following into
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
increases this problem. The need of hour is to consult about erring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
and equipping them with moral values.
Furthermore
, both the parents should adjust their work time in such a way that at least one parent is with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
and
also
we can adopt America system the 'Adopt a grand parent' which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to enable a passing on the values.

Hammering on the last nail. I
am inclined
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that if the whole of the society-take collective steps than the stigma of juvenile delinquency will
be washed
away.
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IELTS essay Levels in juvenile crime are increasing rapidly in the most cities around the world. Give reasons of your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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5 paragraphs
323 words
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