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Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible while others argue that it has had a very negative impact Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.2

Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible while others argue that it has had a very negative impact 2
Many individuals around the globe prefer having a small-sized family to a big-sized family. This essay will discuss the benefits and pitfalls of a small family in a big family. There are two main advantages to having a small family. The first one is the cost. Raising children in the world today is quite costly, as expenses per child ranges from education, clothing to food. The higher the sum total of children in a family, the higher the expenses used in upbringing. Another advantage is a better standard of living. The living standard of a large family can be low compared to a small sized family because the resources are used by a higher number of people. For example, a small family of three with a monthly income of 2, 500 euros will live better, go to better schools, have a good health insurance coverage and eat healthier foods than a big family of fifteen with the same income. Therefore, the reduced cost and higher living standard are the benefits of having less kids, and consequently, a small family. There are two main drawbacks to having a small family. The first is reduced social interaction. Due to the low number of individuals in small-sized families, interaction rarely occurs. This can result in social dissociation in which the person involves exhibits both physical and emotional detachment. For instance, a family with one child has no one to interact with when his/her parents are away at work, unlike families with four or five children. In addition, another pitfall of a small family is the dependence. Parents with a significantly lower number of children tend to be overprotective. These parents rarely allow these kids to engage in activities or chores suiting for the child’s age, resulting in an adult that is never independent. In summary, many people would rather have a small family than a big family. This essay discussed the pros and cons of having a small family over a large family.
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family
to a
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big
-sized
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family
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small
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family
in a
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big
family.

There are two main advantages to
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having
a
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small
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family
. The
first
one is the cost. Raising
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children
in the world
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today
is quite costly, as expenses per child ranges from education, clothing to food. The higher the sum total of
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children
in a
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family
, the higher the expenses
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used
in upbringing. Another advantage is a better standard of living. The living standard of a large
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family
can be low compared to a
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of three with a monthly income of 2, 500 euros will
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of fifteen with the same income.
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cost and higher living standard are the benefits of
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family.

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a
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small
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. The
first
is
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reduced
social interaction.

Due to the low number of individuals in
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small
-sized
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families
, interaction rarely occurs. This can result in social dissociation in which the person involves exhibits both physical and emotional detachment.
For instance
, a
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family
with one child has no one to interact with when his/her parents are away at work, unlike
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families
with four or five
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children
.
In addition
, another pitfall of a
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small
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family
is the dependence. Parents with a
significantly
lower number of
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children
tend to be overprotective. These parents rarely
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allow
these kids to engage in activities or chores suiting for the child’s age, resulting in an adult
that is
never independent.

In summary,
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would
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than a
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. This essay discussed the pros and cons of
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a
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over a large
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible while others argue that it has had a very negative impact 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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