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Televisions are one of the entertaining sources present in the modern world. and in most places is used as a stress reliever and as a way of gaining knowledge or to know about general affairs. Some people have a mindset that television makes people lazy and addicted to a particular thing. This essay will discuss how televisions have made people lives interesting and beautiful. To enhance with technology has played a vital role in peoples day to day lives. Television being the part of this modern technology has played both positives and negatives in all the age groups but thinking about the positivity we see that children after finishing their studies can invest some of their time watching TV shows, discovery etc to enhance their knowledge. Watching these shows on television help them reduce the chance of having a bad eye sight. Watching television together brings the whole family together and also having various OTT platforms such as Netflix, Amazon prime brings many latest and old movies which can be seen at home rather than going at a expensive movie hall this more importantly brings the family together and helping them spend a quality time. For adults It helps them to stay in touch with the world and to listen and to know about general affairs. Television also helps the working age group to have a stress free time after a hectic schedule of their work On the other hand it can become a spoiler when people don’t set a limit of spending time on it. Sometimes individuals start spending several hours in front of the TV screen which tends making them lazy and unhealthy. For example children tend to spend a lot of time watching cartoons and movies. They should be encouraged to play outdoor games and be physically and mentally healthy rather being a lazy and an obese child. To conclude, excess of anything in the world is considered bad and when used efficiently can be benifitiary for anyone using television as a stress reliever and as a way of connecting to the social and personal life brings joy the atmosphere around you and everyone around you.
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Some
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people
have a mindset that
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television
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makes
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people
lazy and addicted to a particular thing. This essay will discuss how
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televisions
have made
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people
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lives
interesting and
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beautiful
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To enhance with technology has played a vital role in
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peoples
day to day
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lives
.
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Television
being the part of this modern technology has played both positives and negatives in all the age groups
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thinking about the positivity we
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see
that children after finishing their studies can invest
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some
of their
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time
watching TV
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shows
, discovery etc to enhance their knowledge. Watching these
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shows
on
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television
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help
them
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bad
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together
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brings
the whole family together and
also
having various
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OTT
platforms such as Netflix,
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Amazon prime
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brings
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many
latest and
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old
movies which can be
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seen
at home
rather
than going at
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a
expensive movie hall this more
importantly
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brings
the family together and helping them spend a quality
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time
. For adults It
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helps
them to stay in touch with the world and to listen and to know about general affairs.
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Television
also
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helps
the working age group to have a
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free
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time
after a hectic schedule of their
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On the other hand
it can become a spoiler when
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people
don’t set a limit of spending
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time
on it.
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Sometimes
individuals
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spending several hours in front of the TV screen which tends making them lazy and unhealthy.
For example
children tend to spend
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a lot of
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time
watching cartoons and movies. They should
be encouraged
to play outdoor games and be
physically
and mentally healthy
rather
being a lazy and an obese child.

To conclude
, excess of anything in the world
is considered
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bad
and when
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used
efficiently
can be
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benifitiary
for anyone using
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television
as a
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stress
reliever and as a way of connecting to the social and personal life
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brings
joy the atmosphere around you and everyone around you.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that televisions make their life more interesting and beautiful ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
6.0
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