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How the town changed before or after

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A glance at the blue print describes on how a town was changed after the erection of a hydroelectric power dam amid 1990 to 2010. Overall, it is clearly visible that town had added hydroelectric dam and several artificial things, However forests and ancient structure were disappeared, while mountain and river remain unchanged. To commence with, in 1990 the river which flowed from north to south were divided in two equal parts. whereas on sinistral part of river there was an ancient structure, rareplant and animals and forest. Towards its right therewas a greenery land and villages. In addition to that, in 2010 the town looked totally mordernised. the flow of the river was interrupted and an artificial lake was constructed regarding north of the town. the ancient structure was knockdown and farm land was abandoned for the lake. Likewise forest and wildlife species were chopped down. A large hotel was built towards righthand side of the lake and also village was relocated to extreme south of the river bank. Lastly on the western side of the river electric grid is established.
A glance at the blue print
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describes
on how a
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town
was
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changed
after the erection of a hydroelectric power dam amid 1990 to 2010.
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, it is
clearly
visible that
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town
had
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added
hydroelectric dam and several artificial things,
However
forests and ancient structure
were disappeared
, while mountain and
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river
remain unchanged. To commence with, in 1990 the
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river
which flowed from north to south
were divided
in two equal parts.
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whereas
on
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sinistral
part of
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river
there was an ancient structure,
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rareplant
and animals and forest. Towards its right
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therewas
a greenery land and villages.
In addition
to that, in 2010 the
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town
looked
totally
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mordernised
.
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the
flow of the
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river
was interrupted
and an artificial lake
was constructed
regarding north of the
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town
.
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the
ancient structure was knockdown and farm land
was abandoned
for the lake.
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Likewise
forest and wildlife species
were chopped
down. A large hotel
was built
towards
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righthand
side of the lake and
also
village
was relocated
to extreme south of the
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river
bank.
Lastly
on the western side of the
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river
electric grid
is established
.
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IELTS essay How the town changed before or after

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
182 words
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