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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. v.1

People these days have contradictory opinion regarding the role of school education in child’s development. Each opinion has its own pros and cons; in my opinion children has to go to school in order to learn things that are not covered in academic curriculum. School develops both academic and personal development skills in the students. Student that goes to the school have more advantage that the others in terms of the following aspects: · They learn to be more disciplined, mannered and organized. · Interaction with hundreds of different students and teachers gives them the patience to work in team and understand the nature of different people. · The up-to-date Academic knowledge makes the aware of what’s happening in the recent time in terms of different industries and fields. · Academic education introduces the students about History and how evolved we are now compared to the past. My manager has extra ordinary technical skills in networking and server management, but he lacks communication skills and he doesn’t know how to interact with people in a mannered way – because he has learnt never been to higher school. Teaching at home is important, but it can’t replace the school. My opinion regarding teaching at home is supportive, but I strongly believe that children needs to go to school and they should be taught at home as well. Learning from home has a lot of advantages as well, that I have listed below: · They have more time to work on the skill they are interested in, this will make them expert in their area of interest. · They will not waste their time doing subjects that they are not interested in and those courses that will not help them in their career building. My cousin brother is a successful YouTuber, he is Master in Business Administration; Meanwhile he was studying, after his school he used to put all his focus and efforts in building his YouTube channel. Now he runs and business and he has employed people who can do video editing and recording for this channel. Thus, my opinion is very clear that academic education should not be compromised at any cost, and children should allocate time at home for his area of interest. This would open for him higher opportunities then the children who does only school or home education. Both areas need to be covered in order for child to cope with upcoming economic crisis and high unemployment.
People
these days have contradictory
opinion
regarding the role of
school
education
in child’s development. Each
opinion
has its
own
pros and cons; in my
opinion
children
has to
go to
school
in order to learn things that are not covered in
academic
curriculum.

School develops both
academic
and personal development
skills
in the
students
.
Student
that goes to the
school
have more advantage that the others in terms of the following aspects:

· They learn to be more disciplined, mannered and organized.

· Interaction with hundreds of
different
students
and teachers gives them the patience to work in team and understand the nature of
different
people. ·
The up-to-date
Academic
knowledge
makes
the
aware
of what’s happening in the recent
time
in terms of
different
industries and fields.

·
Academic
education
introduces the
students
about History and how evolved we are
now
compared to the past.

My manager has
extra ordinary
technical
skills
in networking and server management,
but
he lacks communication
skills and
he doesn’t know how to interact with
people
in a mannered way
because
he has
learnt
never been to higher school.

Teaching at home is
important
,
but
it can’t replace the
school
. My
opinion
regarding teaching at home is supportive,
but
I
strongly
believe that
children
needs to go to
school and
they should
be taught
at home
as well
. Learning from home has
a lot of
advantages
as well
, that I have listed below:

· They have more
time
to work on the
skill
they
are interested
in, this will
make
them expert in their area of interest.

· They will not waste their
time
doing subjects that they are not interested in and those courses that will not
help
them in their career building.

My cousin brother is a successful YouTuber, he is Master in Business Administration; Meanwhile he was studying, after his
school
he
used
to put all his focus and efforts in building his YouTube channel.
Now
he runs and
business and
he has employed
people
who can do video editing and recording for this channel.

Thus
, my
opinion
is
very
clear
that
academic
education
should not
be compromised
at any cost, and
children
should allocate
time
at home for his area of interest. This would open for him
higher opportunities then
the
children
who
does
only
school
or home
education
. Both areas need to
be covered
in order for child to cope with upcoming economic crisis and high unemployment.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

Essay
  American English
12 paragraphs
410 words
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