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Some people believe that success is the best measure of intelligence. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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Most people suggest that the best way to measure intelligence is through their success. However, there are also other indicators contributing towards triumph from being diligence, learning from mistakes and the right opportunities for individuals to stand out among many more people. I believe that brilliance is not the greatest marker and here are the reasons why. Firstly, a person does not need to be smart in order to be a winner in their life. In other words, not all successful people are intelligent. Many great scientists drop out of school and entrepreneurs of large multinational companies didn’t finish college. Issac Newton discovered gravity and many other laws, but he was not bright as a child and was asked to be removed from school. This proves that an exam or quiz you did in school does not define your worth of victory. Learning from past mistakes and analysing what can be better will increase the chances of opulence in lifespan. I believe that learning from mistakes and taking the risk to step up will lead to your final destination of life. Moreover, many find being successful gives joy and purpose in their life. Society tends to award privileges encountered towards fortune individuals. The higher paying tier jobs also lean towards the professional profession which requires great knowledge in the field of work. This made the statement that an intellectual person equals prosperity. However in the real world, fantasising your life often comes with a great deal of work and effort to reach the peak. So intelligence is not a great way of measuring success. Overall, it can be concluded that cleverness can not be the best way to measure success as there are many indicators leading towards a person's success. There’s not a best way to standardise and line everyone is a system to judge them. Everyone are able to shine through no matter what their status is in life.
Most
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suggest that the best way to measure intelligence is through their success.
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, there are
also
other indicators contributing towards triumph from being diligence, learning from mistakes and the right opportunities for individuals to stand out among
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many
more
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people
. I believe that brilliance is not the greatest marker and here are the reasons why.

Firstly
, a person does not need to be smart in order to be a winner in their
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life
.
In other words
, not all successful
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people
are intelligent.
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Many
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great
scientists drop out of school and entrepreneurs of large multinational
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companies
didn’t finish college. Issac Newton discovered gravity and
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many
other laws,
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but
he was not bright as a child and
was asked
to
be removed
from school. This proves that an exam or quiz you did in school does not define your worth of victory. Learning from past mistakes and
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analysing
what can be better will increase the chances of opulence in lifespan. I believe that learning from mistakes and taking the
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risk
to step up will lead to your final destination of life.

Moreover
,
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many
find being successful gives joy and purpose in their
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life
. Society tends to award privileges encountered towards fortune individuals. The higher paying tier jobs
also
lean towards the professional profession which requires
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great
knowledge in the field of work. This made the statement that an intellectual person equals prosperity.
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However
in the real world,
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fantasising
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life
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often
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comes
with a
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great
deal of work and effort to reach the peak.
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So
intelligence is not a
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great
way of measuring success.

Overall
, it can
be concluded
that cleverness can not be the best way to measure success as there are
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many
indicators leading towards a person's success. There’s not
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a
best way to
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standardise
and line everyone is a system to judge them. Everyone
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are
able to shine through no matter what their status is in
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life
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that success is the best measure of intelligence. with this?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
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