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Some people believe that societies benefit from closer contacts and relationships with foreigners brought about by international business and tourism. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that societies benefit from closer contacts and relationships with foreigners brought about by international business and tourism. ox7pB
In recent years, international tourism and business exchanges have become more and more popular around the world. Countries can benefit from each other through good relations, and they are also considered one of the main driving forces of social development. Obviously, international tourism and business exchanges have many positive aspects, but the shortcomings are also apparent. On the one hand, international tourism and commerce promote the interaction between the two countries and remove cultural barriers. When people go to other countries, they tend to understand the local culture. At the same time, the locals try their best to be hospitable and make a good impression on tourists. Another obvious benefit is that it promotes economic development, especially in tourist destinations. With the arrival of many tourists, there is an urgent need for base installation such as hotels to accommodate and serve them, which significantly promotes the local job market because many workers and service personnel are required. On the other hand, international tourism brings many disadvantages to the local environment. For example, when people come to a new place from different countries, they will use transportation to move from one place to another. In order to meet their daily needs, a large number of cars and buses are needed every day to release long-distance tourists. This will emit a large amount of exhaust gas, resulting in poor air quality and pollution of the local environment. At the same time, tourists like to visit historical places in a new country they just came to, and some of them do not respect this historical place, so these people can leave garbage or destroy the environment of this place by leaving there. In conclusion, international tourism and business exchanges have their positive and negative sides. Despite the shortcomings, international tourism and commerce have more benefits for local people and governments.
In recent years,
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international
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tourism
and business exchanges have become more and more popular around the world.
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Countries
can benefit from each other through
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good
relations, and they are
also
considered one of the main driving forces of social development.
Obviously
,
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international
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tourism
and business exchanges have
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many
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positive
aspects,
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but
the shortcomings are
also
apparent.

On the one hand,
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international
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tourism
and commerce promote the interaction between the two
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countries
and remove cultural barriers. When
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people
go to other
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countries
, they tend to understand the
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local
culture. At the same time, the
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locals
try their best to be hospitable and
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make
a
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good
impression on
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tourists
. Another obvious benefit is that it promotes economic development,
especially
in
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tourist
destinations. With the arrival of
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many
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tourists
, there is an urgent need for base installation such as hotels to accommodate and serve them, which
significantly
promotes the
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local
job market
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because
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many
workers and service personnel
are required
.

On the other hand
,
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international
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tourism
brings
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many
disadvantages to the
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local
environment.
For example
, when
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people
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come
to a new
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place
from
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different
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countries
, they will
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use
transportation to
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move
from one
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place
to another. In order to
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meet
their daily needs,
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a large number of
cars and buses
are needed
every day to release long-distance
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tourists
. This will emit a large amount of exhaust gas, resulting in poor air quality and pollution of the
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local
environment. At the same time,
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tourists
like to visit historical
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places
in a new
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country
they
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just
came to, and
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some
of them do not respect this historical
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place
,
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so
these
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people
can
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leave
garbage or
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destroy
the environment of this
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place
by leaving there.

In conclusion
,
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international
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tourism
and business exchanges have their
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positive
and
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negative
sides. Despite the shortcomings,
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international
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tourism
and commerce have more benefits for
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local
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people
and
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governments
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that societies benefit from closer contacts and relationships with foreigners brought about by international business and tourism.

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