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some people believe that social networking sites eg facebook had huge negative impacts on individuals and society To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

some people believe that social networking sites eg facebook had huge negative impacts on individuals and society v. 2
Apparently, social media has connected people globally so it became easy for masses to stay in touch. Although, some people say social networking has bad effect on persons and societies. Though everything comes with boon and bane so I disagree with the statement. In previous era, people had not had modes to stay in touch with people who live far from them, today social sites not provided the facility to talk or chat but they also got the chance to see eachother through videos chat. Moreover, they can share going activities with friends, near and dear ones. For example, Facebook, a social site which is helping people to stay in touch and doing numbers of activities at same time. Furthermore, this platform has proven the huge platform for the common people to reach their voice to high authorities by trending hatchtag regarding any issue due to this indeed authority does reply for the resolutions. Consequently, it reduced the gap between normal person and administration. To site an example, COVID-19 has locked everything in entire globe due to lack of facility people are facing so much problems but social sites are helping them for introducing their trouble to authorities so they can assist people accordingly. To conclude, people should use it wisely so they can get more benefits of it. Everything comes with two side if wise usage is done then it leads in positive way.
Apparently
,
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social
media has connected
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people
globally
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so
it became easy for masses to stay in touch. Although,
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some
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people
say
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social
networking has
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bad
effect on persons and societies. Though everything
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comes
with boon and bane
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so
I disagree with the statement.

In previous era,
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people
had not had modes to stay in touch with
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people
who
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live
far from them,
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today
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social
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sites
not provided the facility to talk or chat
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but
they
also
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got
the chance to
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see
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eachother
through videos chat.
Moreover
, they can share going activities with friends, near and dear ones.
For example
, Facebook, a
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social
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site
which is helping
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people
to stay in touch and doing numbers of activities at same time.

Furthermore
, this platform has proven the huge platform for the common
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people
to reach their voice to high authorities by trending
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hatchtag
regarding any issue due to this
indeed
authority does reply for the resolutions.
Consequently
, it
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reduced
the gap between normal person and administration. To
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site
an example, COVID-19 has locked everything in entire globe due to lack of facility
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people
are facing
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so
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much
problems
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but
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social
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sites
are helping them for introducing their trouble to authorities
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so
they can assist
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people
accordingly
.

To conclude
,
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people
should
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use
it
wisely
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so
they can
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get
more benefits of it. Everything
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comes
with two side if wise usage
is done
then it leads in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
way.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay some people believe that social networking sites eg facebook had huge negative impacts on individuals and society v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
235 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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